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He couldn't get back his bag of gold because an eagle took it up and flew high in the air while he was taking a bath in the river. The eagle was out of sight before he could do anything.
I did my best but would you please help me make it more ordered? I feel that this can be written in a better way.
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sundarnaz he was taking a bath in the river. Other ways of saying this are while he was having a bath in the river or while he was bathing in the river .
- sundarnaz he was taking a bath in the river.
- Other ways of saying this are while he was having a bath in the river or while he was bathing in the river .
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sundarnazhe was taking a bath in the river.
Other ways of saying this are while he was having a bath in the river or while he was bathing in the river.
0Trying to preserve most of what you have in your version, I come up with this:
While he was bathing in the river, an eagle took his bag of gold and flew off with it before he could do anything to get it back.
CJ
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