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Theorist like John Dewey argues a strong connection between education and personal experiences. “He had definite requirements for effective educational experience by saying experience is a necessary component in education” (Bard, 1999, p.53). The experience that Dewey theory mentions could be volunteerism, which gain student a great experience. Teacher and school social worker are responsible to improve this value among students by encouraging, inviting to participate, and showing desirable consequence for volunteers. Especially young students are attracted to awards, gifts, and thanks sign. “The signs of appreciation that seems to mean the most to volunteers are those that come from the youngsters” (Wachter, 1999, p.59). Wachter confirms the importance of appreciation signs to volunteers how it encourages them to volunteer again. This relates to Skinner’s theory that argues ‘operant conditioning’ from causing a consequence to occur. Skinner argues, “When someone does something that brings about desirable consequence, the person may repeat the behavior in similar circumstance” (Bard, 1999, p.56). Theorist Alfred Adler argues a strong connection between person as individual and social communication “Social Interest: means the person's consciousness and his awareness of the humanitarian community, and its direction towards dealing with the social world around it. He believes that people need to cooperate with each other in order to achieve personal goals and other social. And social concern is the standard of the mental health (Adler); because the engine of sympathy and altruism, protecting the individual from selfishness, and make him feel the importance and existence”. (Saleh A A, 2007).

Volunteerism is not only benefit the facet of work, but also it significantly promotes the volunteer. It is, “increased awareness of important social issues, greater appreciation for diversity, and decreased negative stereotypes were attributed to the volunteer experience” (Joseph R. Ferrari, 1999, p.126). This value helps volunteer to behave professional and educational. For that reason,this project is a big chance for younger learners to cooperate with the community and it has a large impact on their learning as well. For example, “John Dewey, an advocate of service-learning, believed that students would learn more effectively and become better citizens if they engaged in service to the community and had this service incorporated into their academic curriculum” (Education, 1999).

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