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It is argued that the preservation of wild animals and birds is drawing too much concern and too many resources of society. Personally, I totally agree with this point of view.

On the one hand, there are many reasons why people pay too much attention on the protection of wild animals. Firstly, nowadays, more and more non-governmental organizations have established in order to protect and preserve wild animals; however, they are too concerned about animal-related activities in many parts of the world. For instance, TTQ, a wild animal organization, accused My Tam, a famous singer in Viet Nam, of using lion in her video for advertising purpose while she didn’t. Secondly, news about wild animal could be widespread rapidly on the social network. For example, a video of a bear is imprisoned could attract millions of shares and likes on Facebook after several it was posted.

On the other hand, it is true when said that people are spending too many resources in protecting wild animal. To begin with, a great deal of money is required to carry out research and experiments in preserving wild animals. For instance, in Viet Nam, each year, government spend millions dollar in finding the way to recover gene of some rare birds in Phu Quoc Island. Furthermore, the expenditure for this protection is sometime unnecessary, it would be better if using this money in invest public service such improving bus system or providing welfare for retiree to enhance living standard of residents.

In conclusion, it seems to me that amount of financial resources and attention are focused too much on the protection of wild animal.