Help me improve my written English, please...

Hi all,

Could someone please read through this business letter and advise me on grammatical mistakes, phrases or choices of words that doesnt sound like genuine English, or changes I can make to make it really really great....? (like..... professionally written by a native speaker)...... Thank you very much!!!!

First of all, we would like to thank you for your reply. Your attention is much appreciated.



In price sensitive areas/markets, the act of conforming to the RoHS directives is insignificant. The quality of the products is not their major concern, and the performance of the products needs not to be accurate and exact. However, it is an entirely differently story in the EU market. Now that your factory is closed, we are the only supplier that can substitute. Only our quality products can substitute for the products manufactured by your factory.



Our products have the same quality as your own ones, but cost less than those manufactured by your factory. We, too, have the free capacity; therefore it is guaranteed that there will be no risks on your side. You do not need to worry about the product quality or whether or not your goods will be delivered on-time.



In addition to having the same quality products, choosing us will give you more added values, and there will be no risks, such as quality and on-time delivery. Having thought about all the advantages you can have, we believe it is a right decision for you to choose us. Moreover, choosing us also means cost saving for you. Extra cost builds up for your company while you are sourcing; for example: communications, time, travel, inspection cost…etc. And the worst of all, if you choose the wrong supplier, it becomes a potential bomb which could lead to a disastrous loss of capital for your company. Now your core policy is different, why spend all these unnecessary costs?



Your company and us have been on friendly terms for many years. We have paid close attention to the incident of the close-down of your factory, and have given supports wherever we could. We are on the way to be your partner. But mutual interactions need to be in place if a true strategy partnership is to happen.



We sincerely look forward to working together with you and becoming real strategy partners.

Sincerely