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I'm applying for an exchange program Korea and there are a few questions I need to answer. Below are those and my answers. I'd really appreciate if you guys could correct my grammar & give me critiques towards my answers. TIA.

1. Why are you applying for this program and what did you prepare for applying this program?

I applied for the program because I’ve always wanted to explore another part of Asia, and not just for a vacation, but to stay longer be immersed with the people; and for that reason I think an exchange program is the best. Because then I’ll be able to interact daily with Korean students my age and we can exchange ideas and also with the professors too. What makes the program extra special is also because I get to to it with other ASEAN students, which seems very exciting and once in a lifetime experience.

I’ve learned to read Hangul. And also, though this wasn’t for the intention of applying to this program, I have been learning about Korean culture for quite a long time, through Simon and Martina’s YouTube channel. Their channel is mostly about food, but they also shares about Koren culture, like Korean dating culture, how media represents men and women through advertising, etc. I think it will help me to be less shocked even if I were to go there for the first time.

1. Goals and Objectives (What do you hope to accomplish through this program?):

I hope to expand my horizons, not just in terms of business knowledge, but also in networking. I also plan to be able to speak decent Korean upon my return to Indonesia.

Although I’m still in undergraduate, I hope to be able to do some sort of collaborative studies with other ASEAN students, especially with those in Social Science. One of the many things that could be interesting to study is the different approach that Korean startups take when looking for external funding. I once took an online course called Beyond Silicon Valley: Growing Entrepreneurship in Transitioning Economies that touched on the subject of startup businesses in Greece. So, I want to see what government programs South Korea has as a larger economy country, in contrast with Greece or Indonesia. It will also be interesting to see if crowdfunding is as popular in South Korea as it is in North America.

1. How can you contribute to your home country after this program?

I will gain a lot of knowledge from this program. So from there I hope to be able to cultivate the startup culture in Indonesia so that we can have a competitive edge in AEC. And to achieve that, I believe a cooperation among ASEAN members is crucial, and through this program I hope to build a network with other ASEAN students.

Korea is known to be a leading country in technology, a rival for Germany and Japan. This is proven by Samsung being the best manufacturer of Smartphones and Smart TVs and having the fastest internet connection in the world. If I were to be selected as a participant of this program, I would use the chance to learn more about South Korean technology, and see if there is an opportunity for Indonesian brands to partner with them and maybe adopt some of their innovations. So, if I could speak Korean, it will make it a hundred times easier for me to strike a professional communication with them.

Second, a country with advanced technology like South Korea must have the best engineering university. Without a doubt, there are a lot of Indonesian students who wish to study engineering there. I plan to have a tutoring service (?) that prepares students with basic language skills & cultural information to succeed studying there. It also serves as an agency to connect them with universities they wish to attend. This way, I hope to give an easier access for Indonesian students to learn engineering and technology, so that in the future, Indonesia could also be more advanced in those areas. All in all, I could really use the business skills and relations I gain from studying at XXX University.