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The chart below shows the percentage of households in owned and rented accommodation in England and Wales between 1918 and 2011.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparison where relevant.The bar chart illustrates the number of families dwelling in owned and rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.It is noticeable that renting houses was a less popuar choice over time, while the percentage of owning houses was much higher. In 1918, over than three quarters of people in England and Wales needed to rent apartment, compared to only 22% of those living in private house. While the former increased gradually in the half following decade, the latter was opposite trend, which was nearly 60% and over 40% respectively, in 1961. The figures recorded 50% in both areas in 1971, half living in owned accomodation and half living in rented house.Over the next 30 years, the proportion of people renting house continually decreased to around 30% before it went up back by 5% in 2011. In contrast with the number of home owners, it reachead at the highest level at almost 70% in 2001 and then it slightly fell to 65% in the following 10 years.

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Your essay is a good length. I recommend three, not four paragraphs for Task 1.

Please read my advice for Task 1 essays. It has details on the mistakes of vocabulary usage.

IELTS TASK 1: Hints, Tips And Advice

Vocabulary Words For Task 1: Reference Post

The bar chart illustrates (wrong word. Use "illustrate" for diagrams and pictures, not for graphs and charts.) the number (wrong word. "Number" means something like 1,254,998 or 15 or 623. The chart does not show numbers of families.) of families ~~dwelling~~ in owned compared to ~~and~~ rented houses in England and Wales from 1918 to 2011.

~~It is noticeable that~~ (Read my advice) renting houses was a less popuar choice over time, while the percentage of owning houses was much higher. (You did not notice the most important feature of this figure. The total of the two percentages is always 100, no matter which year you pick. So if one value goes up, the other one has to go down. )

In 1918, over than three quarters of people in England and Wales rented, ~~needed to rent~~ apartment, (Not a good word choice because houses can be rented, not just apartments.) compared to only 22% of those living in ~~private~~ a home that they owned. ~~house~~. While the former increased gradually in the half following decade, (incorrect expression. A decade is 10 years. Half a decade is 5 years.) the latter ~~was~~ had the opposite trend, which was nearly 60% and over 40% respectively, in 1961. The values were ~~figures~~ (wrong word. Read my advice.) recorded 50% ~~in both areas~~ in 1971, half living in owned accomodation and half living in a rented house.

Over the next 30 years, the proportion of people renting house continually decreased to around 30% before it went up back by 5% in 2011. In contrast with the number (wrong word) of home owners, (homeowners is one word) it reachead at the highest level at almost 70% in 2001 and then it slightly fell to 65% in the following 10 years.

Model essay:

The time series bar chart gives the percentages of families living in England and Wales who rented their accommodation over the 93-year period from 1918 to 2011. It also plots the percentage who owned their own homes, but the total of the two adds up to 100% at each time point. Nine points in time are shown.

Overall, home ownership increased substantially, with a broad peak occurring in the decade between 1991 and 2001. The renters surpassed the homeowners in the years up to 1971, but homeowners dominated in the last five decades.

At the beginning of the period, 1918, 78% lived in rented housing, and the remaining 22% owned their own homes. At that time, there began a general upward trend in home ownership, increasing to its highest value of 70% in 1991. There was an intervening period (1939-1953) where there was no distinctive trend; the percentage hovered around 33%; that is, one third of the population owned their homes and two thirds rented. In 1953, the increase in ownership resumed. The numbers of owners and renters were equal (50% each) in 1971. After another stable period, 1992-2001, the trends reversed and the percentage of home ownership declined from 70% to 65% at the end of the period, 2011.

Note - you can use the word "numbers" for the single point in time, 1971, because there was one total population, and half of them rented and half of them owned their homes. So their numbers, whatever the absolute value was, were the same.

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