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Advertising is all around us, it is an unavoidable part of everyone’s life. Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives while others say it is negative. Discuss both view and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your knowledge or experience. You should write at least 250 words.





Some people say that advertising is a positive part of our lives because they realize the interest of advertising today. Through advertising, they knew more about products, thus they have more choice between the same kind of product, luxury or cheap, famous or normal. People care much about shopping, they need to choose the best product. So, advertising is one of the best ways to help them satisfy their desire.



Beside many profit that advertising bring to us, there are some trouble advertising make us unpleasant. Advertising poster is so big that block our view, advertising on television, radio, newspaper, movies appear too much make us feel tired up.



In my opinion, advertising has more interest than unpleasant. Advertising makes our life more interesting and more choice. Advertising is the best ways to make people know about your product, if you don’t advise your products for other, your product will not well-known even your product is very good.



Just imaging that there is no advertising on the world, have you ever though people can go to the moon as tourist? Once day, you want to another product instead of your daily product, I know that you will start with advertising. Finding through advertising is more convenient than asking people or go to the market.



If there is no advertising, I never know about TOEFL, TOEIC or other English certificate. Owing to advertising, I have found the most suitable English for me after many years learning at once place. For me advertising is very useful in my life.
  

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Exactly, Advertising in our life is an important part, if we are in any business or wish to be popular for any purpose. It depends on individual’s purpose. There are many advantages of advertising as we would be known by most of the people according the amount of advertisement.

  • Exactly, Advertising in our life is an important part, if we are in any business or wish to be popular for any purpose.
  • It depends on individual’s purpose.
  • There are many advantages of advertising as we would be known by most of the people according the amount of advertisement.
  • Incase, we want to be secure and don’t like to come in light through maintaining our privacy for every task, we find advertisement as an odd task for us.
  • Moreover, one of my friends has advertised to himself and become a good editor by publishing articles on different topics.
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Exactly, Advertising in our life is an important part, if we are in any business or wish to be popular for any purpose. It depends on individual’s purpose. There are many advantages of advertising as we would be known by most of the people according the amount of advertisement. Incase, we want to be secure and don’t like to come in light through maintaining our privacy for every task, we fin

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