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Today more and more people are using mobile phones and computers. Thus, people are loosing the ability to communicate face-to-face. To what extent do you agree or disagree?
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It is argued that using computers and wifi devices could negatively affect our direct communication skills. I completely agree with this statement.

Abusing mobile phones and computers could result in detrimental effects on face-to-face communication. Firstly, instead of talking with each other and benefiting from emotional support of daily conversation that family members or friends provide, people exchange information through electric devices. As a result, they have fewer opportunities to practice non-verbal skills, which is very necessary to communicate face-to-face. Secondly, there are too many distracting things on mobiles and computers that easily make people not completely concentrate on communicating. For example, people are likely to pay attention to entertaining apps and games and do not listen to what other people are saying.

Furthermore, electric waves emitted from screens of computers and mobile phones could do harm to our physical and mental health, which leads to a less effective face-to-face conversation. People tend to fall asleep if they use those devices to much that they cannot get into deeply the communication. Rather than listening carefully to the opposite partner and preparing what to talk, all they can do is keeping themselves conscious enough. Moreover, eyes sight of those who spend a huge amount of time on the devices us usually less flexible than that of ordinary people. Therefore, they cannot keep a good eye contact to whom they are talking to.

In conclusion, I would like to restate my initial opinion that although computers and mobiles are useful for mankind to some extent, they also have certain bad influences on humans, especially for the ability of communication.
  

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It is argued that using modern technologies such as computers and wifi devices smartphones could negatively affect our direct personal communication skills. I completely agree with this statement. Abusing Extensive use of mobile phones and computers could can result in detrimental effects on less face-to-face communication.

  • It is argued that using modern technologies such as computers and wifi devices smartphones could negatively affect our direct personal communication skills.
  • I completely agree with this statement.
  • Abusing Extensive use of mobile phones and computers could can result in detrimental effects on less face-to-face communication.
  • Firstly, instead of talking with each other and benefiting from the emotional support of daily conversation that family members or friends provide, many people these days exchange information through electr on ic devices.
  • As a result, they have fewer opportunities to practice non-verbal skills, which is are a very necessary to important part of the communicat ion process.
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It is argued that using modern technologies such as computers and wifi devices smartphones could negatively affect our direct personal communication skills. I completely agree with this statement.

Abusing Extensive use of mobile phones and computers could can result in detrimental effects on less
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I don't under stand we can use "could" in the first paragraph, and use "can" in the second paragraph.
First paragraph: It is argued that using modern technologies such as computers and wifi devices smartphones could negatively affect our direct personal communication skills
Second paragraph: Abusing Extensive use of mobil
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"Can" is stronger than "could." In the first paragraph, you're just making a general (neutral) statement by referring to what some people claim. In the second paragraph, you are trying to prove your point.

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