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Fight against the noises





During the period of preparing for the GRE, I started to learn one important ability-- resisting the noises around when I am doing something.



Generally, there are two ways to bring you a quiet mind when you are engaging a task. One is to find a quiet place to do your task. The other is to cultivate your ability to ignore the noises outside. You cannot always succeed in using the first method considering the cost of finding such a quiet place and the limitations in some occasions. Luckily, however, you can always rely on the second method since it depends on how you treat the disturbance.



I've had experience on comparing the two methods. 4 months ago, to have a quiet environment to prepare the analytical writing of GRE, I went to library everyday. Nevertheless, I found there's one problem of doing so. It cost me up to one and a half hours on the road between my dormitory and library everyday. Since time is extraordinarily precious to me that time, wasting so much time on road was unacceptable to me. So, after I had finished the analytical writing, and began the study of the rest part of the exam, I changed my strategy-- stay in dormitory. Although there were some interruptions from roommates and from others in the same building, I found that I had more time to study as long as I could resist the disturbance outside and clam down my mind.



Of course, I am not doing well in concentrating on the task on hand sometimes, and the efficiency of doing things under noises is not high. However, after more and more practices on this aspect, I feel that it is easier and easier to keep my attention to the task despite the annoyance. In the past, when I was doing a task, the noises around would make me annoyed and nervous, I couldn't concentrate on the task. Now, when I meet the same situation, I learn to reduce the sensitivity to the outside.



I am practicing doing work under noises. I am on summer vacation now, and there's no noise when I am studying in my room at home generally. However, to cultivate my ability to resist noises when I am dealing with one task, I turn on the TV to make noises while I am studying. This is hard experience, but I believe I can benefit from this.