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Harry1999 Posted 14 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Help me correct the story.
I have just completed this story, also used some lines from the LOTR movie. I just changed some text.
Here it is;
Oh! It's all wrong. By rights you shouldn't even be here, but you are. It's in some great stories. For the ones that really mattered. The world that was full of danger and darkness, and sometimes, you didn't want to know the end. Because, how could the end be happy? How could the world go back to the way it was, when so much bad had happened? The folks in the story had only a hope. They were hoping for the shadow and the darkness to pass. They were hoping for a new day to come with a sunshine that will shine out the clearer. They kept trying and moving, but in the end the hope had faded and they failed to avoid the inevitable, they fell into a never ending darkness.
Is this story fine? or Do I need to change some text?
Here it is;
Oh! It's all wrong. By rights you shouldn't even be here, but you are. It's in some great stories. For the ones that really mattered. The world that was full of danger and darkness, and sometimes, you didn't want to know the end. Because, how could the end be happy? How could the world go back to the way it was, when so much bad had happened? The folks in the story had only a hope. They were hoping for the shadow and the darkness to pass. They were hoping for a new day to come with a sunshine that will shine out the clearer. They kept trying and moving, but in the end the hope had faded and they failed to avoid the inevitable, they fell into a never ending darkness.
Is this story fine? or Do I need to change some text?
Top answer
Oh! It's all wrong. By rights you shouldn't even be here, but you are.
- Oh!
- It's all wrong.
- By rights you shouldn't even be here, but you are.
- It's in some great stories.
- For the ones that really mattered.
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Oh! It's all wrong. By rights you shouldn't even be here, but you are. It's in some great stories. For the ones that really mattered. (fragment)
The world that was full of danger and darkness (fragment) , and sometimes, you didn't want to know the end. Because, how could the end be happy? How could the world go back to the way it was, when so much bad had happened? The folks in
The world that was full of danger and darkness (fragment) , and sometimes, you didn't want to know the end. Because, how could the end be happy? How could the world go back to the way it was, when so much bad had happened? The folks in
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