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Once children enter school, teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. Agree/ disagree?

Schools play an important role for children. Children are five years old need to enter school to be educated because many people think that teachers have more influence on their intellectual and social developments than parents. I don't agree with that idea because both parents and teachers have influence on children even if they go to school or not.

On the one hand, teachers have influence on children because of some reasons. The first reason is that children can come in contact with many friends in school, this will help them become more confident in crowded places. If they are only at home, they can't communication with anyone except their parents. The second reason is that at school, teachers will teach basic and advanced knowledge to children, help them have full knowledge about everything, thereby developing child's mind. Children can't to be taught those things at home by parents. The final reason is that some parents can't spend more time teaching their child because of busy work, so children enter school to be taught better. Therefore, most children's time are at school, where they meet their teachers, thence, they are influenced by teachers more than parents.

On the other hand, parents give them a warm feeling of family, the love of parents have a great impact on the formation of personality of the child. Parents are also a source of motivation to help child develop wisdom and life skills.

In conclusion, both parents and teacher have influence on child's developments. Therefore, to help children grow comprehensively, parents and teachers should teach children together.