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It is generally believed that the Internet is an excellent means of communication but some people suggest that it may not be the best place to to find information.


Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.


It seems impossible to go through a day without communication. In our current lifestyle, Internet plays an important role in co mmunication. By using a smart phone connected to Internet, we can do everything we want for example: chatting with our friends all over the world without caring about the distance; staying in our house and ordering goods, foods, etc just by surfing Internet and choosing the things we need.


On my point of view, we can send and receive information between two or more through Internet such as: contacting with our partners, discussing our problems, handing in our homeworks, our assignments, etc. By this way, we can not only save time and save money as well. It is absolutely the most effective way to communicate in our modern life.


By the same token, there is no denying that Internet helps us make our life better, especially in surfing information faster and more convenient. However, besides its own advantages, it has a lot of disadvantages also. Finding information through Internet can make us be confused of diversity sources of information. It is quite hard to identify whether it is reliable information or not.


Moreover, we can be distracted when using Internet by notifications from our social network accounts. And, one of the most important disadvantages we must mention is inappropriate contents. Unrelated advertisements can automatically appear on our screen. Additionally, there are a lot of spam letters, messages sent to our social accounts.


In general, Internet would be an useful tools in our modern life if we spend time and use it in creative ways.

  

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You missed the entire point of the topic. You are off-topic in your entire essay. If you miss the main question in the topic sentence, you will not get a good score, no matter how good your grammar or vocabulary is.

  • You missed the entire point of the topic.
  • You are off-topic in your entire essay.
  • If you miss the main question in the topic sentence, you will not get a good score, no matter how good your grammar or vocabulary is.
  • You answered this question: What are the advantages of the Internet?
  • Do its disadvantages outweigh the advantages?
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You missed the entire point of the topic. You are off-topic in your entire essay. If you miss the main question in the topic sentence, you will not get a good score, no matter how good your grammar or vocabulary is.

You answered this question: What are the advantages of the Internet? Do its disadvantages outweigh the advantages?

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