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Tan_rixco Posted 18 years ago
Letter Writing

Help me check and correct the memorandum

My english lecturer has asking we to write the memorandum to her and passup the memorandum this tuesday as the coursewrok mark. so i hope you all can help me correct the grammar mistake and broken english

the title of memorandum is :
Your company is organizing a three-day seminar on"engineering and society." act as project manager, write the memorandum to all your supportinntes and encourge them to attend the seminar, also inform them about the benifit of attending such a seminar.

memorandum:

ROBOTIC & ELECTRONIC SDN BHD
MEMORANDUM


To : All Staff, Development Department
From : CP Teow, Manager
Date : 25 November 2008
Subject : Attend Three-day Seminar on “Engineering and the Society

Our company is organizing a three-day seminar on “Engineering and the Society” on 3 December 2008 at the Royal Sunway Hotel ballroom 2. The theme of the seminar is “To be success engineering in the factory”. This seminar will start from 3 December 2008, 8am to 5 December 2008, and all the activity will be free including food and dwelling. The purpose of writing this memo is to encourage you to attend the seminar.

I would appreciate very much if you could attend the seminar that offer a lot of activity and benefit such as:

1. The top engineer in the Malaysia, Mr. Johnson will give a talk regarding the career as engineering. Hence, you can understand the requirement as engineer to improve yourself.

2. Beside, the professor of University of Harvard, Prof. Shakespeare William who major in Electronic Engineering will attend the seminar and give a brief about the new technology. Therefore, you can meet with the international people and exchange the knowledge.

3. In addition, the game “Knowledge is a treasures” will be carry out during the seminar. This will explore the attendant to new knowledge and the important of knowledge.

4. Furthermore, the competition of robotics’ arm will be conduct during the seminar, with the Prof. Shakespeare William be the host and lead the competitor. Consequently, you can explore to new technique and knowledge to build a electronic circuit.

For those who intend to attend the seminar please go to Human Resource Department and take the form and summit it before 1 November 2008.

I hope all of you can make time to attend the seminar so that you can get benefit in the seminar.

Thank you and I looking forward to see you in the seminar.


this is what i write,isit ok? the way i write is very weird and i also no ideal to write.pls help me correct it,thank you very much
  

Top answer

As this is marked coursework I'm not going to correct it for you - but I've underlined the parts you need to amend. Our company is organizing a three-day seminar on “Engineering and the Society” on 3 December 2008 at the Royal Sunway Hotel ballroom 2. The theme of the seminar is “To be success engineering in the factory”.

  • As this is marked coursework I'm not going to correct it for you - but I've underlined the parts you need to amend.
  • Our company is organizing a three-day seminar on “Engineering and the Society” on 3 December 2008 at the Royal Sunway Hotel ballroom 2.
  • The theme of the seminar is “To be success engineering in the factory”.
  • This seminar will start from 3 December 2008, 8am to 5 December 2008, and all the activity will be free including food and dwelling.
  • The purpose of writing this memo is to encourage you to attend the seminar.
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As this is marked coursework I'm not going to correct it for you - but I've underlined the parts you need to amend.

Our company is organizing a three-day seminar on “Engineering and the Society” on 3 December 2008 at the Royal Sunway Hotel ballroom 2. The theme of the seminar is “To be success engineering in the factory”. This seminar will start from 3 December 2008, 8am to 5 December 20
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thank you , thank you very much. thank you nano the brit
you are helping me a lot, now i only know where my grammar mistake. you really help me a lot, thanks nano.
i thought that will no body will replied to my memo, but you different. you help me a lot ..thanks

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