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JustAnotherOne Posted 17 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Help me and you'll see the result on YouTube!
Can someone please check my English please?
If there's something wrong (grammar mistake, some incorrect verbs or wrong construction of a prase), could you please correct it for me?
I'm making a video on YouTube, so you'll see the result once I know the text is correct and I upload the video!
Thanks in advance for your time and kindness!
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It is a period of high recession on planet Earth.
Prices all over the vast planet have risen to unbearable levels,
the economy is falling and the humans seamed to have lost all hopes.
But there’s sparking light at the end of the tunnel, and that
is the shinning XYZ’s site: a new enhanced site version with tons
of computer products, blank disks, office and audio/video equipment
and a lot more, all at your grasps at incredible affordable prices.
XYZ is the new elite rebel group that is successfully fighting against
the Galactic Recession Empire.
They are the fastest, strongest, and highest trained team force on
the planet and they will help you and get you what you need with
your total satisfaction. Log on the new XYZ and
may the force be with you…
If there's something wrong (grammar mistake, some incorrect verbs or wrong construction of a prase), could you please correct it for me?
I'm making a video on YouTube, so you'll see the result once I know the text is correct and I upload the video!
Thanks in advance for your time and kindness!
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It is a period of high recession on planet Earth.
Prices all over the vast planet have risen to unbearable levels,
the economy is falling and the humans seamed to have lost all hopes.
But there’s sparking light at the end of the tunnel, and that
is the shinning XYZ’s site: a new enhanced site version with tons
of computer products, blank disks, office and audio/video equipment
and a lot more, all at your grasps at incredible affordable prices.
XYZ is the new elite rebel group that is successfully fighting against
the Galactic Recession Empire.
They are the fastest, strongest, and highest trained team force on
the planet and they will help you and get you what you need with
your total satisfaction. Log on the new XYZ and
may the force be with you…
Top answer
Hi, Here are a few edits. It is a period of high recession on planet Earth. Prices all over this vast planet have risen to unbearable levels, the economy is failing and people seem to have lost all hope.
- Hi, Here are a few edits.
- It is a period of high recession on planet Earth.
- Prices all over this vast planet have risen to unbearable levels, the economy is failing and people seem to have lost all hope.
- But there’s sparking light at the end of the tunnel, and that is the shining XYZ site: a new enhanced version with tons of computer products, blank disks, office and audio/video equipment and a lot more, all at your grasp at incredible affordable prices.
- XYZ is the new elite rebel group that is successfully fighting against the Galactic Recession Empire.
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Hi,
Here are a few edits.
It is a period of high recession on planet Earth.
Prices all over this vast planet have risen to unbearable levels,
the economy is failing and people seem to have lost all hope.
But there’s sparking light at the end of the tunnel, and that
is the shining XYZ site: a new enhanced version with tons
of computer products, blank disk
Here are a few edits.
It is a period of high recession on planet Earth.
Prices all over this vast planet have risen to unbearable levels,
the economy is failing and people seem to have lost all hope.
But there’s sparking light at the end of the tunnel, and that
is the shining XYZ site: a new enhanced version with tons
of computer products, blank disk
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Thank you very much for your reply and help. I appriciate it. 
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