HELP IN WRITING

I wrote this paragraph once and a moderator posted it with advice that I should register to receive feedbacks (sorry for annoyance). Now I have registered, I hope my message can be posted again.

Let me introduce again: I'm a non-native learner, and I want to be better at writing (my English has been very bad, and now I decide to try more). My first paragraph here is a discriptive paragraph about my mother. I hope I can get your feedbacks. Any feedbacks are very precious to me.

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I love my mother most in my family. She is 46 years old now, so I can see some gray hairs on her head. I used to look up at her a long time ago, but now I am much taller than her. Time sure flies! She has an oval, gentle – looking face with bright, beautiful eyes. Her height is moderate. She looks slim, as the evidence for working hard from year to year to raise me and my sister. She, alone, has taken two lives on her shoulder in the past years. Sometimes, I accidentally glace at her hands, and compared with the photo of her on the wedding day, I found one different thing. Back then, her hands are so beautiful like cherry blossoms in the early spring; now they are scabrous, rough like a body of an old tree. There are some scratches on them, too. However, strangely, I love those hands very much. I may not know everything about my mother, but I can say one thing for sure: those hands contains her love for us. I truly want to cherish them, kiss them, as all things we have got right now all come from them. My mother is neither too easygoing nor too strict to put it in an exact way, shw knows when to be easy and when to be strict to us. She always wants the best for us, always cares for us under any circumstances. My mother is the most important person in my life.

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Thank you very much for reading. And thanks more for giving advice.