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Motivation Letter

I am writing to apply for the Master Degree programme in
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Dear Sir / Madam,

First of all I would like to present a short background about myself. My name is ... . I'm living in ..., ... . I have been studying Industrial Engineering whit specialized in Industrial Production at ... for 4 years. Now I am a last term university student.

During my education I became really serious to continue my education in abroad in order to promote my educational degree. I have a serious purpose for achieving Master degree and after that PHD degree. This is my first precedence in my life that I am concentrating on it. In fact my main purpose is to be the best one in my major.

I am always interested in continuing education in Italy. Before I was accepted to the university, I was trying to continue my bachelor degree in Italy. I studied Italian language at … . Unfortunately the date of my interview in Italian Embassy and one of my high school exams were the same and I missed the interview.

I have never worked in my major; however most of my courses have some projects in order to visit some factories or companies and understand how the courses taught in the university perform in an industrial factory. Besides I was taught some computer skills related to my major. I did some team work project with other students. I would like to earn such experience in abroad too. I am a fast learner and I surely know that I can be a great member of Polimi University.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I look forward to your response.

Yours Sincerely

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