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. Local Abortion Clinic Re Opens- The reopening of a Shreveport, Louisiana abortion clinic could angrier many locals. The reason why is because of it close proximity to their homes. Now, the conflict is that some want the clinic to be closed because of what they call health and safety concerns, while others would like the clinic to be reopened. The question is it safe to open for the doctors at this clinic to perform abortions? 2. Board hopefuls report finances- This story conflict is that Curtis Hook was the only candidate from the District 5 Caddo Race to file his financial report. The other candidates cited that the rule is if you raise less than $200 dollars or spent less than $5,000 dollars, you are not required to file a financial report. Is it fair that Hook was the only one to file a financial report? Shouldn’t everybody be required to file a report?3. Ban Stymies almost all Gulf Drilling- This story informs us about the problems that the BP Oil Spill has caused to offshore drilling, and about all the jobs that were lost because of it. The conflict is that some environmental groups like the idea of drillers facing tougher federal rules because of the Oil Spill. However, drilling executives think the new rules are wasting millions of dollars and causing delays that have led to layoffs.4. Tourist bureaus announce conventions- I think the locals in Shreveport, Louisiana will care the most about this story because it will probably affect them the most. The timeliness is that the conventions will start in December, which is earlier than expected. 5. Michael Vick will start for Eagles on Sunday- Michael Vick, a famous football player, is this article's central figure. Now, there is not a clear cut conflict in this article. Some could say that the conflict is that many dog owners do not want Michael Vick to start this game or play in the NFL for fighting dogs. However, others might say that the conflict is that Michael Vick should be the starting quarterback for the rest of the season not Kevin Kolb.6. Yes, the media does select news stories with certain characteristics over other news stories mainly because writers want to keep their audience reading and some stories just will not do that. Writers select stories that get and keep readers' attention.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

I just have time to do the first one.

Please don't forget to say 'please' when you ask people to help you.

Thanks, Clive

. Local Abortion Clinic Re Opens-

The reopening of a Shreveport, Louisiana abortion clinic could angrier many locals. The reason why is because of it close proximity to their homes. Now, the conflict is that some want the clinic to be closed because of what they call health and safety concerns, while others would like the clinic to be reopened. The question is it safe to open for the doctors at this clinic to perform abortions?

. Local Abortion Clinic Re Opens-

The reopening of a Shreveport, Louisiana, abortion clinic could anger many locals. The reason is its close proximity to their homes. The conflict is that some want the clinic to be closed because of what they call health and safety concerns, while others would like the clinic to be reopened. The question is, is it safe for the doctors if this clinic opens to perform abortions?

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Hi;

I agree with Clive that the volunteers appreciate being asked politely...

danielrams072. Board hopefuls report finances-
This story conflict is that Curtis Hook was the only candidate from the District 5 Caddo Race to file his financial report. The other candidates cited that the rule is if you raise less than $200 dollars or spent less than $5,000 dollars, you are not required to file a financial report. Is it fair that Hook was the only one to file a financial report? Shouldn’t everybody be required to file a report?

This conflict in the story is about candidates' financial disclosures. Curtis Hook was the only candidate from the District 5 Caddo Race to file his financial report. The other candidates refused, citing the rule that if you raise less than $200 dollars or spend less than $5,000 dollars, you are not required to file a financial report. Is it fair that Hook was the only one to file a financial report? Shouldn’t everybody be required to file a report?

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When you mention a conflict, you should say it is about a particular issue or between two parties, X and Y.
For example:

This story describes a conflict regarding the right of the strikers to demonstrate in front of the office building.

This story describes a conflict between the police department and the mayor's office.

Other sentences:

danielrams07The timeliness is that the conventions will start in December, which is earlier than expected.

The conventions will start in December, which is earlier than expected.

danielrams075. Michael Vick will start for Eagles on Sunday-

Perhaps this is a disagreement between dog lovers and Vick's fans about his punishment for the crime of cruelty to animals.

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The reopening of a Shreveport, Louisiana abortion clinic could anger many locals.  Locals are angered over the proximity of the clinic to their homes.  There is conflict because some residents want the clinic closed because of health and safety concerns.  Others would like for the clinic to be reopened.  The question, "Can doctors safely perform abortions at this clinic?"

Clive · Answer

Hi,
The reopening of a Shreveport, Louisiana abortion clinic could anger many locals. Locals are angered over the proximity of the clinic to their homes. There is conflict because some residents want the clinic closed because of health and safety concerns. Others would like for the clinic to be reopened. The question, "Can doctors safely perform abortions at this clinic?"

You have several problems with this version, including repetition, awkwardness and grammar. The version given earlier is better.

Clive

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