Help for my motivation letter

Is it possible that someone could correct my motivation letter for application to a Master Degree (english programm at a Dutch University). Please as soon as possible!

Thanks!

Dear Sir or Madam,

With this letter I would like to apply for entrance to the Master European Studies: Identity and Integration at the University of Amsterdam.

First and foremost I would like to introduce myself. My name is --- and I am from the Netherlands. My interest in culture and Europe started during my period at high school. After graduating I chose to improve my language skills by taking a multi-language year in England and Spain. First England, whereby I decided to go to Oxford because of its University, although I studied at an international language school with other international students, I was in contact with university students as well. This opportunity gave me the enhanced knowledge of English and thought me to be able to discuss at advanced levels as I was an elected as representative for the Cambridge exam classes at the institution. After three months in Oxford I went to Málaga in Spain where I studied Spanish, which I can speak, read, listen and write fluently at present. These nine months abroad thought me to be independent, speak another language than my native language, which in my opinion is inevitable in the contemporary world, as well as it gave me the opportunity to get to know other cultures and perspectives about international subjects.

Back in the Netherlands I decided to study law, which was an interesting study, even though I wanted something more international after my period abroad. Whereupon I went to Spain again where I worked in several tourism organisations and got to know the Spanish culture and language, although my desire was to study where through I came back to Amsterdam. European Studies at the University of Amsterdam gave me the opportunity to learn about Europe, as well as law and languages which signified a study with all my ambitions in one. In my third year I’ve been abroad again with the Erasmus program where I studied several courses in literary and international relations. During my Bachelor I became enthusiastic about European integration, as well as culture and especially the European Union, therefore I would like to improve my academic skills and knowledge about Europe with a Master Degree. After reading the course catalogue of the several Maters in European Studies, my preference lies with Identity and Integration, first of all to receive classes and information from well know professionals in the European Studies sector, to be able to study with international students, though most important for me are the courses thought in this master which represents my interests about Europe.

In conclusion I would like to say that my Bachelor thesis, finished by the first of July, is about gender equality in the European Union towards women in the European Parliament and Dutch national gender organisations, what connects with European identity and integration. I am prepared to obtain new experiences and in my opinion this Master is the best way to achieve a wide knowledge of European fields in relation to my interest, and give me the opportunity to have an excellent future in a European atmosphere.

I am grateful considering my application and I look forward to a favourable reply.

Sincerely,