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Anonymous Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

Help fix my sentence.

To connect with citizens in new ways, the department launched the page to offer the community with another avenue to access information from the Police Department.

Does this sentence need the 2nd "with" after the word community, or does it make the sentence wordy?
  

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” My opinion is that when referring to a particular department, the word Department is capitalized. When this new page was being offered as an alternative, that would be the approval stage. After it had been approved for posting (presumably on line), it started being ‘provided’.

  • ” My opinion is that when referring to a particular department, the word Department is capitalized.
  • When this new page was being offered as an alternative, that would be the approval stage.
  • After it had been approved for posting (presumably on line), it started being ‘provided’.
  • Yes, the second “with” is required.
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“To connect with citizens in new ways, the Department launched this page, which provides the community with another avenue to access information from the Police Department.”

My opinion is that when referring to a particular department, the word Department is capitalized. When this new page was being offered as an alternative, that would be the approval stage. After it had

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