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This paragraph is part of a compare/contrast essay. I am comparing one character from Animal Farm and one from either Julius Caesar or Lord of the Flies. The two I chose are Napoleon and Jack. Some guidelines I have to follow are: Only a max of 2 "to be" verbs per paragraph and use present tense. Any help would be appreciated. Here is my similarities paragraph:
Thesis: Both William Golding’s Lord of the Flies and George Orwell’s Animal Farm, illustrate that people are hungry for power.
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Napoleon, a pig, and Jack, a human, share many similarities in their hunger for power. First, their greed and selfishness brings about the destruction of the societies. Napoleon, who becomes the leader of the farm when the animals overthrow Mr. Jones and when he chases out Snowball, keeps extra food and overworks the animals. Through Napoleon’s decisions many animals die and his leadership role causes more problems. Jack, a power-hunger character, leads the boys to savagery on the island. When Jack kills a pig, he develops a lust for blood. He becomes overcome by greed for power and wants everyone to follow him and do nothing but hunt. This eventually leads to two boys dying and many more problems. The two characters’ hunger for power cause nothing but trouble for their respective societies and the death of individuals. Second, both characters break rules that were set forth to maintain order in their respective societies. At first, Napoleon creates seven commandments which all the animals must live by. But later on he begins to break most, if not all, of the commandments. For example, Napoleon’s mind is set on obtaining as much power as possible and eliminating oppositions that he kills any animal that has been in connection with Snowball after his expulsion. This act breaks the commandment of animals not killing other animals. Similarly, Jack disobeys many of the rules set forth by Ralph that help to keep order on the island. Jack deserts the democratic way of life and forms his own group and rules. By breaking the rules, these two characters illustrate their disobedience to a system meant to keep order. As shown through both of these characters, people who want power will take any means necessary to achieve that goal.
Thesis: Both William Golding’s Lord of the Flies and George Orwell’s Animal Farm, illustrate that people are hungry for power.
Body Paragraph 1
Napoleon, a pig, and Jack, a human, share many similarities in their hunger for power. First, their greed and selfishness brings about the destruction of the societies. Napoleon, who becomes the leader of the farm when the animals overthrow Mr. Jones and when he chases out Snowball, keeps extra food and overworks the animals. Through Napoleon’s decisions many animals die and his leadership role causes more problems. Jack, a power-hunger character, leads the boys to savagery on the island. When Jack kills a pig, he develops a lust for blood. He becomes overcome by greed for power and wants everyone to follow him and do nothing but hunt. This eventually leads to two boys dying and many more problems. The two characters’ hunger for power cause nothing but trouble for their respective societies and the death of individuals. Second, both characters break rules that were set forth to maintain order in their respective societies. At first, Napoleon creates seven commandments which all the animals must live by. But later on he begins to break most, if not all, of the commandments. For example, Napoleon’s mind is set on obtaining as much power as possible and eliminating oppositions that he kills any animal that has been in connection with Snowball after his expulsion. This act breaks the commandment of animals not killing other animals. Similarly, Jack disobeys many of the rules set forth by Ralph that help to keep order on the island. Jack deserts the democratic way of life and forms his own group and rules. By breaking the rules, these two characters illustrate their disobedience to a system meant to keep order. As shown through both of these characters, people who want power will take any means necessary to achieve that goal.
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Anonymous I have suggested some other verbs that you can use. Napoleon, a pig, and Jack, a human, share many similarities in their hunger for power. First, their greed and selfishness brings about the destruction of the ir societies.
- Anonymous I have suggested some other verbs that you can use.
- Napoleon, a pig, and Jack, a human, share many similarities in their hunger for power.
- First, their greed and selfishness brings about the destruction of the ir societies.
- Napoleon , who becomes the leader of the farm after when the animals overthrow Mr.
- Jones and he deposes when he chases out Snowball, He hoards the keeps extra food and overworks the animals.
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AnonymousI have suggested some other verbs that you can use.
Napoleon, a pig, and Jack, a human, share many similarities in their hunger for power. First, their greed and selfishness brings about the destruction of their societies. Napoleon, whobecomes the leader of the farm afterwhenthe animals overthrow Mr. Jones and h
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