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I am writing a response paper for 2 stories, a parable and a tale. My English grammar is weak so please help me edit my paper. I don't mind you telling how to do better for my future preference... heheh ...
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In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society where we have a lot of different kinds of personalities. This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel. The parable shows us how cruel our society can be. First of all, we will be left behind if we can not catch up with our friends like the caravan left the camel back in the jungle. Everyone should take care of themselves and not be the burden for other people. Secondly, there are good, honest people as well as deceitful, dishonest people around us. Everyone thinks and does things in their best interest for themselves first. Although the lion is an honorable creature, he has to eat the camel because he desires to live. Furthermore, other animals trick the camel to volunteer to be the lion’s meal because they need to lion to protect them. This parable shows us the other side of friendship. Although friends can be made everywhere, not all friends can be trusted.
Another interesting story about human nature is a tale by Chuang Chou. The tale is short, but its moral is as deep and meaningful as The Camel and His Friends. Chou wants to send us a message that power and money are an illusion. Freedom is the most precious treasure. Chou tells the story about a tortoise to represent his personality to two officials. Then Chou deliberately asks the two officials to answer a question about the whether the tortoise want to live in a mud or be honored in a box, which he knows the answer. He wants the officials to realize they also have the answer that they are coming to ask him. He would rather live poor and free, than to be rich but lose his freedom. In addition, the two officials play as majority of us who are chained to the world of materials, yet only Chou has the wisdom to break free from the chains.
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I am writing a response paper for 2 stories, a parable and a tale. My English grammar is weak so please help me edit my paper. I don't mind you telling how to do better for my future preference... heheh ...-------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------------
In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society where we have a lot of different kinds of personalities. This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel. The parable shows us how cruel our society can be. First of all, we will be left behind if we can not catch up with our friends like the caravan left the camel back in the jungle. Everyone should take care of themselves and not be the burden for other people. Secondly, there are good, honest people as well as deceitful, dishonest people around us. Everyone thinks and does things in their best interest for themselves first. Although the lion is an honorable creature, he has to eat the camel because he desires to live. Furthermore, other animals trick the camel to volunteer to be the lion’s meal because they need to lion to protect them. This parable shows us the other side of friendship. Although friends can be made everywhere, not all friends can be trusted.
Another interesting story about human nature is a tale by Chuang Chou. The tale is short, but its moral is as deep and meaningful as The Camel and His Friends. Chou wants to send us a message that power and money are an illusion. Freedom is the most precious treasure. Chou tells the story about a tortoise to represent his personality to two officials. Then Chou deliberately asks the two officials to answer a question about the whether the tortoise want to live in a mud or be honored in a box, which he knows the answer. He wants the officials to realize they also have the answer that they are coming to ask him. He would rather live poor and free, than to be rich but lose his freedom. In addition, the two officials play as majority of us who are chained to the world of materials, yet only Chou has the wisdom to break free from the chains.
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Hey, I made the necessary corrections in CAPS so you can identify them. In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society IN WHICH we have a lot of different kinds of personalities. This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel.
- Hey, I made the necessary corrections in CAPS so you can identify them.
- In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society IN WHICH we have a lot of different kinds of personalities.
- This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel.
- The parable shows us how cruel our society can be.
- First of all, we will be left behind if we CANNOT catch up with our friends like the caravan left the camel back in the jungle.
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Hey, I made the necessary corrections in CAPS so you can identify them.
In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society IN WHICH we have a lot of different kinds of personalities. This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel. The parable shows us how cruel our society can be. First of all, we will be le
In a parable The Camel and His Friends by Bidpai, the jungle represents our harsh society; A society IN WHICH we have a lot of different kinds of personalities. This small society has an honorable lion, a treacherous fox, and a naïve camel. The parable shows us how cruel our society can be. First of all, we will be le
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