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This is an essay of evil. I was wandering if someone can make some corrections to it and suggest a good, and creative title.

<< The first reason why people are fascinated with villains is that villains are persistent people. An example of this is Satan, from “Paradise Lost.” “...All is not lost; the unconquerable will, and study of revenge, immortal hate, and courage never to submit or yield” (“Paradise Lost” Page 59). What Satan is saying is that not everything is lost and that he stills have hopes and he is not going to give up. In my opinion, Satan is very persistent, because no matter what happens he will continue with his plans. Another example of persistent is Adrian, from the movie “Little Nicky.” During a fight with Nicky, Adrian and him get inside a flank that will keep them inside for eternity. Adrian doesn’t want to stay there so he gets out of the flank inside of Nicky’s body. “...not long now...soon it will all be mine...behold your new Satan...” (“Little Nicky”). As well, as Satan, in paradise Lost, Adrian doesn’t give up.
The second reason why people like villains is because villains are very confident. One example of a confident villain is Satan, from “Paradise Lost,” Satan says “Better to reign in hell than serve in heaven” (“Paradise Lost” Page 63.) What Satan meant was that he prefers to rule in a horrible place than being a slave in a peaceful place. In my opinion, Satan knows what he wants and he is a very confident person. Another example of a confident villain is Slytherin’s son, “...I knew one, I would be able to lead and to finish Salazar Slytherin’s noble work...” (“Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets.”) What he means is that he is sure that this time everything will to come to an end.
The third reason why people like villains is because villains are very powerful, and is very difficult for someone to succeed against an evil sight. An example of this is Satan. “...for the mind and spirit remains invincible, and the vigor soon returns...” (“Paradise Lost” Page 60) What Satan means is that they cannot be killed in a battle because they are made from God. I think that Satan knows how powerful he is and that they have nothing to loose. Another example of a powerful villain is Scrappy-Doo. “...now to complete the transformation, I shall absorb the pure one...to rule the world with my all powerful army” (Scooby-Doo Movie, The) What Scrappy shows is that they are have power, but sometimes they need from someone else to become so powerful.
In conclusion, people are fascinated with villains because of they’re persistence, Confidence and mighty power. Even if they are evil sometimes people liked villains more than the good character >>>

Thanyou very much.

Laura

Maj · Accepted Answer

This is an absolutely amazing essay. Wow.

Martinez86ca · Answer

Thank you very much Maj. I really apreciate your opinion.

Martinez86ca · Answer

Please someone suggest a good title

Mirapence · Answer

Dear Laura:

I am not a very good writer myself. Nevertheless, I attempted to make a few corrections. It is strictly for your reference only beause your writing as it is appears still good enough.

For a long time, there has been a battle between good and evil. Throughout the fight, good has usually come above evil and bad. Even so, I have always wondered why villains do fascinate people. Maybe it is because of their persistence, confidence, and power that they display.

The first reason why people are fascinated with villains is because of their persistent character. An example of this is Satan from Paradise Lost, “...All is not lost; the unconquerable will, and study of revenge, immortal hate, and courage never to submit or yield.” (Paradise Lost Page 59) What Satan is saying is that not everything is lost. He still hopes that he is not going to give up. In my opinion, Satan is very persistent because no matter what happens he will continue with his plans. Another example of persistence is Adrian from the movie, “Little Nicky.” During a fight with Nicky, Adrian taking Nicky with him gets into a flank that will keep them inside for eternity. Adrian doesn’t want to stay there, so he gets out of the flank from Nicky’s body saying, “...not long now...soon it will all be mine...behold your new Satan...” (Little Nicky). As much as Satan in Paradise Lost does not give up, nor does Adrian.

The second reason why people like villains is that they are very confident. One example of a confident villain is Satan again from Paradise Lost where he says, “Better to reign in *** than serve in heaven” (“Paradise Lost” Page 63.) What Satan means is that he prefers ruling in a horrible place to being a slave in a peaceful one. In my opinion, Satan knows what he wants, and he is a very confident spiritual being. Another example of a confident villain is Slytherin’s son who says, “...I knew one, I would be able to lead and to finish Salazar Slytherin’s noble work...” (Harry Potter and the Chamber of Secrets) What he means is that he is sure that everything will come to an end this time.

The third reason why people like villains is because they are very powerful, and it is very difficult for anyone to successfully rise against an evil might like theirs. An example of this is who else but Satan himself when he declares, “...for the mind and spirit remains invincible, and the vigor soon returns...” (“Paradise Lost” Page 60) What Satan means is that he cannot be killed in a battle because he is created by ***. I think that Satan knows how powerful he is and that he has nothing to lose. Another example of a powerful villain is Scrappy-Doo who dares tell, “...now to complete the transformation, I shall absorb the pure one...to rule the world with my all powerful army” (Scooby-Doo Movie, The) What Scrappy shows is that he has power, but sometimes he needs help from someone else to enhance his power.

In conclusion, people are fascinated with villains because of their persistence, confidence, and mighty power. Even though villains are evil, people, sometimes, like them more than the good characters.

What about "the suble attractions of villains" as a title?

I sincerely hope it helps.

Mirapence

Maj · Answer

It's one of the most interesting essays i have read. It got me thinking and I was wondering what villains are attracted to but that would be another interesting essay.

Martinez86ca · Answer

Dear Mirapence,
I appreciate your help a lot. It had helped me a lot.
I just hope my English teacher will enjoy as much of you did.
THANK YOU VERY MUCH.

Laura

Rommie · Answer

Surely villains are attracted to people who are attracted to villians. Otherwise how would they get boyfriends or girlfriends? <img class='emoticon' style='Width:19px;Height:19px;' data-delaysrc='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/5.gif' src='https://uat-englishforward-forums-backend.s3.us-west-2.amazonaws.com/Emoticons/5.gif' alt='Emotion: wink'/>

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