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Volcano1985 Posted 18 years ago
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He looked at the picture as if he was, in his mind, comparing a newer dated picture which was drawn by a great mastery, with an older dated picture which was drawn by a master method with brave colours

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It is an awkward sentence. - as if he were "by a great mastery" - not correct. Either say "by a great master" or "with great mastery" "master method" is not right.

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  • It is an awkward sentence.
  • - as if he were "by a great mastery" - not correct.
  • Either say "by a great master" or "with great mastery" "master method" is not right.
  • "drawn by a master using brave colors" or "drawn masterfully with a palette of brave colors" also, "newer dated" and "older dated" - the word "dated" is superfluous.
  • Older and newer refer intrinsically to dates.
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It is an awkward sentence.
I would use the subjunctive mood in the second verb.- as if he were

"by a great mastery" - not correct. Either say "by a great master" or "with great mastery"
"master method" is not right. "drawn by a master using brave colors" or "drawn masterfully with a palette of brave colors"
also, "newer dated" and "older dated" - the word "dated"
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Can you rewrite my sentence ?
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