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The graph compares the amount of carbon dioxide released by per person in four different countries: UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007

It is clear that average CO2 emission per person in each country represents diverse changes. While Italy and Portugal have the amount of CO2 released dramatically increasing, that of other countries seems to be reduced tendency

During 40 years, average CO2 emission per Portuguese sharply goes up to 5 metric tons instead of only 1 metric tons in 1967. Likewise, Italy is seen to have the amount of average carbon dioxide released in each person considerably rising from 4 metric tons to nearly 8 metric tons in the end of period.

On the other hand, although starting at 8.5 metric tons, CO2 emission in UK is slightly decline to 5 metric tons. Whilst in per British releases up to 10.5 metric tons of CO2 in 1977 before falling down to over 5 metric tons in 2007

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AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

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Model Essay:

The line graph compares the average amount of carbon dioxide released annually per person in four different countries (The UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal) over a 40-year period, 1967 to 2007. Measurements are given in metric tonnes and the values shown on the graph range from less than one to eleven tonnes.

Overall, the graph can be divided into two time periods. During the first thirty years, from 1967 to 1997, two countries (Portugal and Italy) showed an increase, and the other two (The UK and Sweden) showed a decrease. After 1997, emissions in three countries decreased and they were nearly flat in the fourth (Portugal).

The ranking of the countries changed substantially from the beginning to the end. In 1967, The UK had the highest value, at about 10.8 tonnes. This was followed by Sweden (8.5), Italy (4.1) and Portugal (1.3). In 2007, the leader was still The UK at 8.7 tonnes, followed by Italy (7.8), Portugal and Sweden (5.5).

In particular, The UK showed a constant value (about 10.8) for the first ten years followed by slowly declining linear curve (a rate of about 0.6 tonnes per year) from 1977 to 2007. In contrast, Sweden, Italy and Portugal had large increases in the first ten years; emissions went up in Sweden by about 16% (from 8.8 to 10.2), over 45% (4.2 to 6.2) in Italy, and 83% in Portugal (1.2 to 2.2). The year 1977 was a year of peak emissions for Sweden. In the next ten years, it decreased its per capita emissions by over 30% (10.2 to 7.1), and continued its decline at a linear rate of 0.1 tonnes per year from 1987 to 2007. Portugal had the largest percentage increase (over 350%) over the period, though its per capita emissions were nearly constant over the final ten years.

Van nguyen le · Answer

The graph compares the amount of carbon dioxide released by per person in four different countries: UK, Sweden, Italy and Portugal from 1967 to 2007

It is clear that average CO2 emission per person in each country represents diverse changes. While Italy and Portugal have the amount of CO2 released dramatically increasing, that of other countries seems to be reduced tendency

During 40 years, average CO2 emission per Portuguese sharply goes up to 5 metric tons instead of only 1 metric tons in 1967. Likewise, Italy is seen to have the amount of average carbon dioxide released in each person considerably rising from 4 metric tons to nearly 8 metric tons in the end of period.

On the other hand, although starting at 8.5 metric tons, CO2 emission in UK is slightly decline to 5 metric tons. Whilst in per British releases up to 10.5 metric tons of CO2 in 1977 before falling down to over 5 metric tons in 2007

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