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The chart below shows the number of travellers using three major airports in New York City between 1995 and 2000.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

Write at least 150 words.

The bar chart illustrates the information of people who chosen three majoy airports ( John F. Kennedy, LaGuardia, and Newark ) in New York city from 1995 to 2000.

Overall, it can be seen that over the period, there was a fluctuant trend in number of passenger who travelled Jonh F. Kennedy airport, while the other two airport saw an upward trend. More over, Laguardia airport was the most popular at trend.

In 1995, the amount of traveller using Laguardia started at 38 milions, this number increased the during period. Furthermore, there was a sharp growth almost 70 milions in people using Laguardia airport in 2000. On the other hand, passenger using John F . Kennedy airport was 28 millions fewer than Laguardia, and higher than Newark in the first year, and then increased remarkably to reach the highest point of 47 milions in 1997. In 1998, which predicted a downward trend at 31 milions in 1999. At the last year, there was a slight growth to 44 milion.

However, the figure of traveller using Newark was lower than the other two airport at 16 milions in 1997. After this point, the trend rose significantly to 42 milions in1998. In last two year it remained stable at 42 milions traveller.

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