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Jenn123 Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Hello, Is the sentence well structured?
Hello! Is the sentence well structured? I used the present tense. Let me know if there're any grammatical mistakes. Thank you.
A true story that has happened 90 years ago, a man of multiple magics, and the last prisoner convicted and sentenced to death and beheaded in the Rattanakosin dynasty. He is widely known as Boonpeng, the Metal Box man, he uses his charm and magic to lure lady who is a wealthy widow into affairs with him, after these affairs he killed the ladies, takes their money and jewelry, put their bodies in the metal boxes and dumped them in the canal.
A true story that has happened 90 years ago, a man of multiple magics, and the last prisoner convicted and sentenced to death and beheaded in the Rattanakosin dynasty. He is widely known as Boonpeng, the Metal Box man, he uses his charm and magic to lure lady who is a wealthy widow into affairs with him, after these affairs he killed the ladies, takes their money and jewelry, put their bodies in the metal boxes and dumped them in the canal.
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Dear Jenn This text seems to be on a similar theme to the previous texts I corrected. Did you see those? There are some corrections in there which you can apply in this text too.
- Dear Jenn This text seems to be on a similar theme to the previous texts I corrected.
- Did you see those?
- There are some corrections in there which you can apply in this text too.
- I'll have another look at it for you later, if you wish.
- Kind regards, Michael
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Dear Jenn
This text seems to be on a similar theme to the previous texts I corrected. Did you see those? There are some corrections in there which you can apply in this
text too. I'll have another look at it for you later, if you wish. Kind regards, Michael
This text seems to be on a similar theme to the previous texts I corrected. Did you see those? There are some corrections in there which you can apply in this
text too. I'll have another look at it for you later, if you wish. Kind regards, Michael
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Hi Michael,
Thanks for the prompt reply.Unfortunately, I didn't get the notification to my previous forum. I was searching for my forum in the discussion bar, poor me I couldn't find it. I have posted two forums one is short summary and the other one is the long summary. I would greatly appreciate it if you could look at them later. Looking forward to your prompt feedback. Thanks in adva
Thanks for the prompt reply.Unfortunately, I didn't get the notification to my previous forum. I was searching for my forum in the discussion bar, poor me I couldn't find it. I have posted two forums one is short summary and the other one is the long summary. I would greatly appreciate it if you could look at them later. Looking forward to your prompt feedback. Thanks in adva
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Jenn123This true storythat has happenedfrom 90 years ago is about a man of many mysteriesmultiple magics, andwho was the last prisonerconvicted andto be sentenced to death and beheaded in the Rattanakosin dynasty. Heiswas widely known as Boonpeng, the Metal-Box man
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Dear Jenn, I have just seen Teechr's response and I can't do better than that. I hope you're OK now. Kind regards, Michael
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