Hello, I need just a final touch on my motivation letter maybe some correction...thanks in advance :)

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am writing to apply for the combined degree programe of Media Arts and Fashion Marketing starting in September 2011.

I have always been interested in a field of media ever since I published my first article in a local magazine at the age of thirteen. However, it was not only journalism I was passionate about. I joined the French theatre in school and we won a national competition held in Košice which gave us the opportunity to take part in a theatre festival in Brno. Thanks to skills I gained during these two enriching years and due to my great results at school I was chosen to give the commencement address at our graduation party which I hope will be a good experience for work in Media arts.

Because of my adventurous personality I spent my junior year in the USA to improve my knowledge of English and to not only learn about their culture but also be a part of it..I was able to integrate into new environment and be a member of Tennis team, Internation Club, Key Club as well as the Drama Club. It was this year spent abroad that opened my eyes and showed me the beauty of other countries and of the English language and led to my decision to study in England.

I was always keen on volunteer community service either helping people in need or in fundraising money for good purposes. In Slovakia I helped to raise money for people with cancer, abused animals or animal shelters. In 2010 I took part as a volunteer in an annual all-night arts festival popular in Europe called La Nuit Blanche (White Night). In the USA I helped with many charity events organized by church I had visited such as taking part in a play to raise money for the church´s camp, serving food for people in need or singing Christmas carols for elderly people.

School has always played a major role in my life. I have always been a student who was eager for new information. My personal motto for these years of studying was Socrates´s well known quote ´´I know that I know nothing´´ which has encouraged me into studying and extending my limits of knowledge. I finished every year of high school with A´s and I was always honored for great school results. To build up a solid foundation, I took a preparation course for Media Communication to widen my knowledge in this area. I have always been amazed by work in Media and when I found that your university offers also a working placement, I knew that was the right choice for me. Although I would love to work in the media, I have always been attracted to fashion industry as well. Since your university provides a combined degree I would be thrilled to attend it.

I am confident that your outstanding university offers excellent courses which can give me sufficient theoretical and practical knowledge and experience to enlarge my skills and achieve all my goals in the area of fashion and media. My dream is to be a part of a well known fashion house and to work in a various media fields and I know that with your professional guidance and with my hard-working and diligent personality, I can turn my dreams into reality.

Thank you for considering my application, and I look forward to your acceptance.

Sincerely yours,

xx