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Some people say that the best way to improve public health by is increasing the numbers of sports facilities . Others , however , say that this would have little effect on public health and that other measure and requires .

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It is the true that nowadays , a numbers of people believe the best way to improve public healthy by is increasing the numbers of sports facilities , and others say this would have little effect on public health. From my perspective , I completely agree with that point of view because of many reasons .

First and foremost , there is a primary reasons why sports facilities can improve public health. It is crystal clear that it encourage people visited to exercise such as gym and fitness. It give us a chance approach and use most of advance equipment. However , in my opinion. Improving health public in outdoor activities have a much more benefit. For example , Vietnamese people prefer do exercise in park , sidewalk than a gym and fitness. It helps us have a atmosphere better. Moreover . doing exercise in sports facilities or outdoor activities no effect people's consciousness.

Apart from practical drawback expressed above , I believe that action of making wide public spaces is detrimental to the society as a whole in general . it can be plain seen that due to the plunge in state budgets predicted in previous paragraph , government have a potential to cut all sorts of costs related to supporting poor people. As a result not only hunger and poverty but also many other social matters . for instance , literacy rate or levels o crime are given golden chance to witness a surge . to illustrate the research mentions before also tailored that since 2013 . , when those ten parks were constructed , the proportion of improverished people in VN has risen considerably by about 9 %

In conclusion . it seems to me that large open spaces should not be created on account of above – mentioned reasons DC