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Mike used to set under the tree which draws close their ancient home that his old, poor father has built. Many questions come to his mind, thinking how possibly he can build his prosperous future in the coming five years. Having a sense of fear of miserable life is a motive for him by pushing his anger to release his strong feelings towards his aspirations. He has an aunt whom considered by all his family as a wise woman. As he reached her house, he found her setting in front of a computer screen, designing some programs. He took a long breath before saying a word. He just kept silent as he was standing near a window, looking outside dreaming about his colorful future. His aunt is as a bank for all his secrets and a source of information; he asked her going outside. Then, they walked among trees towards their best place, which is a lake. She addressed him a statement which changes all his life to the better, so guess any motive sentences you feel that hopefully change him to be a well known person.

Gigilian Nguyen · Accepted Answer

I tried to understand what you had written, then i wrote again, i am not sure it's perfect and you like it or not. But read it =)

Mike use to sit under that tree which grew close their ancient house his old, poor father built. Many questions had come to his mind, and made him think about how to be able to build a prosperous future in the five following years. Getting a sense of fear of miserable life in a motive for him, with pusing his anger to release his strong feelings towards his aspirations.
He had an aunt who was considered as a wise woman by all his family. When he came to her house, he found her sitting in front of the computer screen and designing some programs. He took a deep breath before saying a word. He just kept silent while he was standing close the window, looking outside and dreaming about his colorful future. His aunt was a box which contained all his secrets and the source information. That meant she was the only one to whom Mike confided. He asked her to walk outside. Then, they walked among the trees, towards their best place....That was a pure lake. She said a statement which had changed all of his life then, made it better. (So guess any motive sentences you feel that hopefully change him to be a well known person - I don't quite understand this sentence? I am sorry. I think you wanted readers to guess what Mike's aunt said, right ? )

Issa · Answer

thanks for your correction, but in some points, I disasgree with you.

I will try to state some opinions about this story.

your last question, yes I want readers to state some sentences.

see you then.

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