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I have to make a 7-10 page report on Japanese women civil rights and how it's not enforced. I have to make 3rd person perspective and...I'm having trouble with.

How can I say that " I agree that women in Japan are not treated equal and that the law for equality on both sides of the gender is just a scape goat for politics in Japan which is the majority of men and not women b/c they have a secondary role they live by and is considered an ideal of life for men over in Japan. But Women strength for equality has risen making their status in Japan stronger making it to rise which makes it foolish and selfish in the eyes of Japanese men."

How can I say this in 3rd person perspective.

Paco2004 · Accepted Answer

Hello, Silver Moon!

Nice to meet you. Welcome to this forum.

I'm a Japanese guy and I want to help you. However, I am a bit confused.

I agree that women in Japan are not treated equal and that the law for equality on both sides of the gender is just a scapegoat for politics in Japan which is the majority of men and not women b/c they have a secondary role they live by and is considered an ideal of life for men over in Japan.

I suppose what you agree with would be the opinion
(1) that women are not treated equal to men in Japan
(2) that a (the?) gender-equality law is (has been/was?) just a scapegoat for politics in Japan
But I can't get;
"which is ... not women" :what word is modified by this clause?
because they(=women) have a secondary role they(=men?) live by
"Men live by the secondary role owned by women"? What do you mean by this?
"is considered an ideal of life for men over in Japan".
What word is the subject of this passive?

But Women strength for equality has risen making their status in Japan stronger making it to rise which makes it foolish and selfish in the eyes of Japanese men.

What do you mean? Here I feel as if I got lost.

Could you revise the paragraph above by yourself and post it again?

paco

Paco2004 · Answer

Hello again Silver Moon

I tried to rewrite your what you seemingly want to say. My English is not so good but I am grateful if it could be some help to your rewriting.

It is true that women are not socially equal to men in the Japanese society. The nominal gender equality in rights cited in the constitution has been used only as a runaround by politicians, who are mostly men. Women are given only a secondary role socially as well as in family, which men are considering ideal for enjoying their life. Women's movement for real equality, however, has been gradually stronger in past decades in spite of men's grudges against it.

I was hoping any native speaker could correct this poor writing of mine.

paco

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