Hello everyone , I am practicing IELTS WRITING TASK 1 : BAR CHART . can you check for me , please ?

The bar chart illustrates data about the issues people have when they move to a new country and how the problems vary according to people ‘s ages.

Overall, the age groups experience the same problems to some extent , but the percentage of the older people who find language learning difficult is much higher than the others.

The greatest problem for young people aged 18-34 is becoming friends with others, which experienced by 46 percent of the people in this age group. However, only 38 percent of 35-54-year- old find it hard to make friends, while people over 55 have this problem bout 23 percent.

The most problematic for people in the oldest age group is learning to speak the local language,about 54 percent. In comparision, 35-54 age group find this easier with 36 percent, and the percentage of young people is lowest, at 29 percent.

In contrast to their language learning difficulties , only 22 percent of the oldest peole have trouble finding accommodation . besides, both two others aged groups find it hard to find a place to live with 39 to 40 percent .