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Mr. Tom Posted 11 years ago
Grammar

He doesn't walk -- he slouches forming the ...

Hi

Are these lines OK? Any suggestions are welcome. 

He doesn't walk straight up. He slouches creating/forming a hump on his back. 

Thanks,

Tom
  

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Is the man actually deformed; is he a hunchback? If so: He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, creating/forming a hump on his back.

— Mister Micawber

  • Is the man actually deformed; is he a hunchback?
  • If so: He doesn't walk upright.
  • He slouches, creating/forming a hump on his back.
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Is the man actually deformed; is he a hunchback? If so:

He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, creating/forming a hump on his back.
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Mister MicawberIs the man actually deformed; is he a hunchback? If so:He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, creating/forming a hump on his back.
Thanks, MM.

I need some more light on this. This sentence I wrote is for a person who is NOT a hunchback -- and which is why he 'creates' or 'forms' a hump (which sounds more like a choice) while slouc
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Mr. Tom(For a normal person)He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, creating/forming/accentuating a hump on his back.(For a hunchback)He cannot walk upright. He slouches under (the weight of) his (heavy) hump.
Well, the bold part certainly indicates that he has a real hump. And I don't see any definitive difference between the two. I hink that both sente
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I am grateful, MM.

One last question -- both of these are the same?

He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, his back rounded like a hunchback.
He doesn't walk upright. He slouches, his back rounded like a hunchback's

Tom
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Mr. TomOne last question -- both of these are the same?
Yes.
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