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Mr. Tom Posted 16 years ago
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He asked me if I was interested in meeting him...
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Do you find the following lines natural, especially the yellow parts? Any suggestions are welcome.
He asked me if I was interested in meeting him. He had that typical thick British accent, thus I was straining to understand him (besides the other discombobulating feeling that my boss was constantly watching me from his office).
Thanks,
Tom
Do you find the following lines natural, especially the yellow parts? Any suggestions are welcome.
He asked me if I was interested in meeting him. He had that typical thick British accent, thus I was straining to understand him (besides the other discombobulating feeling that my boss was constantly watching me from his office).
Thanks,
Tom
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I would replace "thus" with "so". "discombobulating" is OK in itself, but it's kind of a joke word, so if the rest of your text is in a serious tone it probably wouldn't be suitable. The standard replacement would be "disconcerting".
- I would replace "thus" with "so".
- "discombobulating" is OK in itself, but it's kind of a joke word, so if the rest of your text is in a serious tone it probably wouldn't be suitable.
- The standard replacement would be "disconcerting".
- From a rigid textbook perspective, "besides" seems slightly grammatically iffy in this role, but in practice I think it works OK.
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I would replace "thus" with "so".
"discombobulating" is OK in itself, but it's kind of a joke word, so if the rest of your text is in a serious tone it probably wouldn't be suitable. The standard replacement would be "disconcerting".
From a rigid textbook perspective, "besides" seems slightly grammatically iffy in this role, but in practice I think it works OK.
"discombobulating" is OK in itself, but it's kind of a joke word, so if the rest of your text is in a serious tone it probably wouldn't be suitable. The standard replacement would be "disconcerting".
From a rigid textbook perspective, "besides" seems slightly grammatically iffy in this role, but in practice I think it works OK.
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