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Alc24 Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
Having trouble with this one sentence
Could you correct these please for me? Tell me if all 3 version can be said and how to make it more natural?
1 For safety purposes, we can't blame the delivery boy for taking longer than the time it takes before we are obliged to give them the pizza for free.
2 For saftey purposes, we can't blame the delivery boy for taking longer than 30 minutes after which it is stated on our pamphlet, the pizza is free./even though there is a line on the pamphlet that states if delivery takes over 30 minutes that the pizza is free.
thank you
1 For safety purposes, we can't blame the delivery boy for taking longer than the time it takes before we are obliged to give them the pizza for free.
2 For saftey purposes, we can't blame the delivery boy for taking longer than 30 minutes after which it is stated on our pamphlet, the pizza is free./even though there is a line on the pamphlet that states if delivery takes over 30 minutes that the pizza is free.
thank you
Top answer
In general, they all try to convey too much information in a single sentence. Improvement would be blame the delivery boy hold the delivery boy responsible...
- In general, they all try to convey too much information in a single sentence.
- Improvement would be blame the delivery boy hold the delivery boy responsible...
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In general, they all try to convey too much information in a single sentence.
Improvement would beblame the delivery boy hold the delivery boy responsible...
Improvement would be
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Thanks, but I don't understand "behold...." I'm trying to say that he's not held responsible?
thank you Philip
thank you Philip
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A few general comments from observing your sentences...
You have a tendency to pack to much information into a single sentence and done so with awkward
grammar structure and incorrect choice of words and punctuations. This combination created an odd and unnatural tone in most of your question sentences even though they may appear correct grammatically. The ability to form natura
You have a tendency to pack to much information into a single sentence and done so with awkward
grammar structure and incorrect choice of words and punctuations. This combination created an odd and unnatural tone in most of your question sentences even though they may appear correct grammatically. The ability to form natura
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Most people agree that you need to make 2 sentences, but I think you can keep it at one sentence if you switch it around a little.
Even though we guarantee free pizza if it takes over 30 minutes to arrive, we shouldn't hold the pizza delivery person responsible if there is some delay.
Still, this might be a little awkward, and in general it seems like a formal description.
Even though we guarantee free pizza if it takes over 30 minutes to arrive, we shouldn't hold the pizza delivery person responsible if there is some delay.
Still, this might be a little awkward, and in general it seems like a formal description.
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