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Contiluo Posted 11 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Grueling game
Please help me correct the following paragraph. Thanks!
A Day out in the Sun
On a sunny weekend afternoon, Mark went to the park to play volleyball with his friends. It was a grueling game full of intense, exciting, competitive match, and the sun was broiling. Suddenly Mark fell unconsciously onto the ground as he was playing the game at the court. His friends first called 119 for help. About five minutes later, an ambulance came to rescue Mark, and the first aiders (paramedics) took him to a hospital. Luckily, Mark was safe and sound, and he learned his lesson the hard way.
A Day out in the Sun
On a sunny weekend afternoon, Mark went to the park to play volleyball with his friends. It was a grueling game full of intense, exciting, competitive match, and the sun was broiling. Suddenly Mark fell unconsciously onto the ground as he was playing the game at the court. His friends first called 119 for help. About five minutes later, an ambulance came to rescue Mark, and the first aiders (paramedics) took him to a hospital. Luckily, Mark was safe and sound, and he learned his lesson the hard way.
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contiluo On a hot and sunny weekend afternoon, Mark went to the park to play volleyball with his friends. It was a grueling gam e, full of intense, exciting competition. , competitive match, and the sun was broiling.
- contiluo On a hot and sunny weekend afternoon, Mark went to the park to play volleyball with his friends.
- It was a grueling gam e, full of intense, exciting competition.
- , competitive match, and the sun was broiling.
- Suddenly Mark fell unconscio us ly onto to the ground as he was playing in the middle of the gam e.
- at the court.
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contiluoOn a hot and sunny weekend afternoon, Mark went to the park to play volleyball with his friends. It was a grueling game, full of intense, exciting competition., competitive match, and the sun was broiling.Suddenly Mark fell unconsciously ontoto the groundas he was playingin the mid
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contiluofirst aiders (paramedics)These words do not mean the same thing.
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I'm confused with the use of comma as written in the sentences. Which is correct, #1 or #2? I prefer #2.
1. About five minutes later, an ambulance came for Mark, and took him to hospital.
2. About five minutes later, an ambulance came for Mark and took him to hospital.
1. About five minutes later, an ambulance came for Mark, and took him to hospital.
2. About five minutes later, an ambulance came for Mark and took him to hospital.
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