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Umirazeti Posted 10 years ago
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Greetings to moderators, can you please look at this sentence and point out any mistakes if I happened to make.
1. A team of Malaysian footballers struggling to overcome personal and collective hardships together as a team and create the most triumphant zero to hero story and gain a place at the Asian Games.
2. Inspired by real events, the pride and passion set in the 1970s, a multicultural team of Malaysian football players struggle to overcome personal and collective hardships as a team. Together they create the most triumphant zero to hero story and gain a place at the Asian Games.
1. A team of Malaysian footballers struggling to overcome personal and collective hardships together as a team and create the most triumphant zero to hero story and gain a place at the Asian Games.
2. Inspired by real events, the pride and passion set in the 1970s, a multicultural team of Malaysian football players struggle to overcome personal and collective hardships as a team. Together they create the most triumphant zero to hero story and gain a place at the Asian Games.
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By addressing your question to moderators only, you are discouraging replies from a number of perfectly competent members who could help you.
- By addressing your question to moderators only, you are discouraging replies from a number of perfectly competent members who could help you.
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By addressing your question to moderators only, you are discouraging replies from a number of perfectly competent members who could help you.
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Sorry, I didn't meant it that way. I would welcome any comments from any members that will help me to enhance my mistakes.
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umirazetiCan anyone help me with the sentence above?I see you are new to the Forums. Please, you need to realize that even though we are a world-wide site with hundreds of people willing to answer questions, you need to give us time to reply. Six minutes is not nearly long enough to wait, normally. Adding another post just congests the system. Please be p
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#1 is not a complete sentence as it contains no main verb.
#2 is fine.
Note that you don't want to enhance your mistakes. You want to correct them.
#2 is fine.
Note that you don't want to enhance your mistakes. You want to correct them.
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Thank you, Rover_KE. Kindly review my suggestion below:
- A team of Malaysian football players struggle to overcome personal and collective hardships as a team. Together they create the most triumphant zero to hero story and gain a place at the Asian.
- The journey of dedicated and passionate young footballers of the Harimau Malaya team - Chow Kwok Keong, Ali, Muthu and am
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#1 needs 'Games' at the end.
#2 is not a proper sentence. The subject, 'The journey' has no main verb. Delete 'and'.
#2 is not a proper sentence. The subject, 'The journey' has no main verb. Delete 'and'.
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