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Subned Posted 16 years ago
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The graph shows unemployment rate among women from 18 to 65 years old. On average about 10% of women are unemployed with the peak at 45 years when every fifth woman doesn't have a job. Second worst is at 18 years old when 15% of women are unemployed. Then we have a decline to 5% of jobless women who are 25 years old. Rate is then stabilized from 25 to 35 years old. Trends for women older than 35 are rapidly upwards with 10% at 65 years old.

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Hi subned: I would not jump around on the graph, but start at the first point and end with the last. g. The unemployment rate starts at 15% for women 18 years of age, declines to 5% at age 25, remains constant until age 35, when it increases to a peak of 20% at age 45.

  • Hi subned: I would not jump around on the graph, but start at the first point and end with the last.
  • g.
  • The unemployment rate starts at 15% for women 18 years of age, declines to 5% at age 25, remains constant until age 35, when it increases to a peak of 20% at age 45.
  • It then declines again to 10% at age 65.
  • Regards, A- s
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Hi subned:

I would not jump around on the graph, but start at the first point and end with the last.
e.g.
The unemployment rate starts at 15% for women 18 years of age, declines to 5% at age 25, remains constant until age 35, when it increases to a peak of 20% at age 45. It then declines again to 10% at age 65.

Regards,
A-
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thank you.
Do I have some important grammar errors?
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There are some minor grammatical errors in your paragraph. Here are some suggestions:

The graph shows unemployment rates among women from 18 to 65 years old. On average, about 10% of women are unemployed with the peak at 45 years when every fifth woman doesn't have a job. The second worst rate is at 18 years old when 15% of women are unemployed. T

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