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Can you please inform me if the below is correct? If no then please indicate to me the correct way.

We acknowledge receipt of your correspondence dated 22^nd April, 2010 and teachers’ letter dated 23^rd April, 2010 regarding Leave Without Pay for the above-named within the Catholic Public Schools Management with effect from:

· 31^st August, 1984 to 1^st September, 1985 and

· 1^st December, 1985 to 5^th January, 1986

Thanks in advance,

PS. Where will I see your response and how long will it take?

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

I suggest this.

We acknowledge receipt of your correspondence dated 22^nd April, 2010 and the teachers’ letter dated 23^rd April, 2010, both regarding Leave Without Pay for the above-named within the Catholic Public Schools Management, with effect from:

· 31^st August, 1984 to 1^st September, 1985 and

· 1^st December, 1985 to 5^th January, 1986

Thanks.

PS. Where will we see your response, please?

Clive

Anonymous · Answer

It looks like you are translating from a language that uses much more formal style, and longer more cumbersome sentences. Without knowing the context, I would say that the style is much too confusing to be acceptable in American Standard English. You mention the teachers' letter. Does this mean that the instructors at the school submitted a letter signed by them all, is it a letter written by one teacher. If it is one teacher, the hyphen should be placed like so: "your teacher's letter".

In American English, the term "management" as a noun referring to a group of people can at times sound odd or somewhat vague and sounds more suited for business enterprises than for schools, where we prefer the term "administration."

"The management at that organization is always swift to act."

"The administration at that school is highly competent."

I would say:

We acknowledge receipt of your correspondence dated April 22nd, 2010 and your teachers' letter dated April 23rd, 2010 regarding leave without pay for the above-named members of the Catholic Public Schools Administration for the following dates:

August 31, 1984 to September 1st, 1985 and

December 1, 1985 to January 5th, 1986.

Grammer

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