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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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Please see the cover letter below. Is there a better way to write this? Our Administrator has chosen this for our cover letter template but I think it could be written a little better. Any suggestions are greatly appreciated.

Thanks,

Kerry

_____________________________________________________________________________SEE BELOW

Dear Ellen:



Enclosed is the Loss Prevention Report from my visit on October 11, 2007. Also, enclosed is a copy of a Loss Prevention Business Plan outlining the safety goals and objectives.



The purpose of the business plan is to develop a direction of the loss prevention services available to you and provide the best benefit in terms of a safe working environment for your employees. After your review of this document, any input you may have would be welcomed.



(***) appreciates your commitment to loss prevention and safety. If you have any questions please call me at the (***) office at 555-968-5555 ext. 874.



Sincerely,



  

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Hi, Here are a couple of suggestions. Clive D ear Ellen: Enclosed is the Loss Prevention Report from my visit on October 11, 2007. ) safety goals and objectives.

  • Hi, Here are a couple of suggestions.
  • Clive D ear Ellen: Enclosed is the Loss Prevention Report from my visit on October 11, 2007.
  • ) safety goals and objectives.
  • The purpose of the business plan is to develop a direction of the loss prevention services available to you and to provide the best benefit in terms of a safe working environment for your employees.
  • After your review of this document, any input you may have would be welcomed.
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Hi,

Here are a couple of suggestions.

Clive

Dear Ellen:



Enclosed is the Loss Prevention Report from my visit on October 11, 2007. Also (no comma) enclosed is a copy of a Loss Prevention Business Plan outlining the (your?) safety goals and objectives.

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