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Hi,please help me with these sentences. A physically attractive woman is she who has big eyes, a small nose, delicate cheekbones, a petite chin, smooth skin, long legs, a slim waist and large hips. (is it correct or should instead of “she” be “a woman”? or "the one") 2. Even so, it is commonly believed that beauty can help a lot in both one's personal and professional life. (is “one’s” necessary here? )3. Not many years ago, beauty parlours were popular only among film stars and VIP's concerned about their body image. (is “body” necessary, I mean isn’t it “hidden” in a word “image”?)4. And women are not the only ones who worry about the way their bodies look: men are just as obsessed. (shouldn’t there be insted of “the way their bodies look” – “the look of their bodies”?)5. In Brazil and Venezuela, parents often treat their teenage daughters to the correction of lips which are too thin, protruding ears or snub noses. (do we say: “treat sb to the correction”?)(I would really appreciate a brief explanation) Thank you.

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

please help me with these sentences.

A physically attractive woman is she who has big eyes, a small nose, delicate cheekbones, a petite chin, smooth skin, long legs, a slim waist and large hips. (is it correct or should instead of “she” be “a woman”? or "the one")

It's not wrong.

But more natural is to say '. . . is one who has . . . ', or perhaps 'A physically attractive woman has big . . . '

2. Even so, it is commonly believed that beauty can help a lot in both one's personal and professional life. (is “one’s” necessary here? It's not essential.)

3. Not many years ago, beauty parlours were popular only among film stars and VIP's concerned about their body image. (is “body” necessary, I mean isn’t it “hidden” in a word “image”? No. ) I'd say eg 'their physical image', to include face as well as body.

If you just say 'image' for famous people, it also encompasses their character and personality.

4. And women are not the only ones who worry about the way their bodies look: men are just as obsessed. (shouldn’t there be instead of “the way their bodies look” – “the look of their bodies”?) Either phrase is OK.

Are you sure you want to start with 'and'?

I'd replace the colon with period.

5. In Brazil and Venezuela, parents often treat their teenage daughters to the correction of lips which are too thin, protruding ears or snub noses. (do we say: “treat sb to the correction”? It sounds very clumsy and iunnnatural. Try to say it another way.)

eg . . . parents often treat their teenage daughters to plastic surgery for the correction of lips. . .

Clive

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