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0(1) Where I think we need to carve out some territory of definition in practice is to say that proselytism is relating to people different from oneself by using means and methods with ulterior motives in order to convert. But what's happening in secular literature is that it is moving even beyond the ulterior method definition, where some secular specialists on human rights and international law use proselytism to mean "any attempt by religious believers to win converts from other religions or from your religion." And when we see proselytism move into that extensive and broad 01b00an02b00 expression, it then curtails on the invitation to witness and to make meaning for people, in terms of engaging them around the validity of Christian perspective.02br
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00Can 01b00an02b00 be deleted? Kindly check punctuation usage in the above passage and insert punctuation where needed.02br
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00(2) They have a vision for what I would call “soul care,” without the same vision and commitment to social care. May I suggest to us that mature evangelists have discerning minds that believe in the whole counsel of God? May I suggest to us, as you listen to that definition, that evangelists are not restricted to religion?02br
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00May I suggest to us, as we think about engagement, can we first of all give permission and take permission. That is to say, people have the right to self-define. I also need to take the responsibility to self-define.02br
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00Is the usage " May I suggest to us" ok? Please check02br
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00(3) We have surrender to life-denying violence that simply incites more deadly and devastating violence.02br
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00Is the usage of " We have surrender to" ok? Please check.02br
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00(4) Half of them were Muslim and half of them were Christian.02br
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00Should the above sentence have a plural usage "Half of them were Muslim01b00s02b00 and half of them were Christian01b00s02b00."02br
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00(5) We need more modeling 01b00of02b00 how to deal with diversity in positive ways.02br
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00Can 01b00of02b00 be replaced with 01b00on02b00? Please check.02br
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00(6) One of my appeals in the Canadian context has been that if we had been better at dealing with diversity between us as Christians in this country, we would be relating to cultural diversity 01b00in02b00 a lot more positively today than we are at this point.02br
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00Is the 01b00in02b00 insertion ok? Please check.0-