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PeteT Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Grammar feedback
Hi! I am looking to improve my writing. I know I am making mistakes, but, I am not sure what they are and what I should be doing to correct them.
Could I possibly ask for some feedback on the following paragraph?
"Spatial perception of sound is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its surrounding environment. In certain cases it is the most important of the senses. The eyes only provide a small window into what surrounds us, if a predator approaches from behind the brain relies on cues from the inner and external parts of the ears to infer it’s location."
I'm unsure about the correct way to order clauses and link between points.
Could I possibly ask for some feedback on the following paragraph?
"Spatial perception of sound is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its surrounding environment. In certain cases it is the most important of the senses. The eyes only provide a small window into what surrounds us, if a predator approaches from behind the brain relies on cues from the inner and external parts of the ears to infer it’s location."
I'm unsure about the correct way to order clauses and link between points.
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Hello, Pete—and welcome to English Forums. Sound perception of space is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its environment. In certain case s, it is the most important of the senses.
- Hello, Pete—and welcome to English Forums.
- Sound perception of space is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its environment.
- In certain case s, it is the most important of the senses.
- The eyes only provide a small window into what is i n front of us, but if a predator approaches from behin d, the brain relies on cues from the inner and outer parts of the ear to determine its location.
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Hello, Pete—and welcome to English Forums.
Sound perception of space is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its environment. In certain cases, it is the most important of the senses. The eyes only provide a small window into what is in front of us, but if a predator approaches from behind, the brain relies on cues from the
Sound perception of space is an invaluable tool used by the brain to understand its environment. In certain cases, it is the most important of the senses. The eyes only provide a small window into what is in front of us, but if a predator approaches from behind, the brain relies on cues from the
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Suggestion: The eyes provide only a small window...
Run-on sentence: ...into what surrounds us. If a predator...
Comma: after 'from behind"
Run-on sentence: ...into what surrounds us. If a predator...
Comma: after 'from behind"
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