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0 This proposal had been slowly gathering steam and, after the events of September 11, 2001, it seemed an ideal project to demonstrate that religions can work together if they came together to produce such a declaration, and to demonstrate further that the religious-secular divide could also be overcome 01 b 00 were this to happen 02 b 00 , for such a declaration could only be produced by a convergence of religious and secular discourse. 02 br
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00 Is the phrase "were this to happen" ok? Or can it be better phrased? Please advise. 0-
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00 Is the phrase "were this to happen" ok? Or can it be better phrased? Please advise. 0-
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02 br 02 br 00 You're trying to do too much with one poor little sentence. 02 br 02 br 00 This proposal had been slowly gathering steam. 02 br 02 br 00 Even with this editing, it's redundant, even circular.
- 02 br 02 br 00 You're trying to do too much with one poor little sentence.
- 02 br 02 br 00 This proposal had been slowly gathering steam.
- 02 br 02 br 00 Even with this editing, it's redundant, even circular.
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0 Holy Sentence, Batmat! 02 br
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00 You're trying to do too much with one poor little sentence. By the time you read the "were this to happen" part you've totally lost track of the first part. 02 br
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00 This proposal had been slowly gathering steam. After the events of September 11, 2001, it seemed an ideal project to demonstrate that religions can work to
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00 You're trying to do too much with one poor little sentence. By the time you read the "were this to happen" part you've totally lost track of the first part. 02 br
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00 This proposal had been slowly gathering steam. After the events of September 11, 2001, it seemed an ideal project to demonstrate that religions can work to
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