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Lucas21c Posted 14 years ago
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Grammar check
Could you tell me whether the following sentence sounds fine?
Thank you.
A French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army after his long-time research.
Thank you.
A French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army after his long-time research.
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No, it doesn't. The last phrase is misplaced. After his long-time research, a French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army.
- No, it doesn't.
- The last phrase is misplaced.
- After his long-time research, a French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army.
- Better: After considerable research, a French scientist, Aper, discovered a means for keeping food fresh for an extended period of time.
- His discovery was used by Napoleon's army.
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No, it doesn't. The last phrase is misplaced.
After his long-time research, a French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army.
Better:
After considerable research, a French scientist, Aper, discovered a means for keeping food fresh for an extended period of time. His discovery was used by Napoleon's army.
After his long-time research, a French man, Aper, figured out a way to keep food items for a long time for Napoleon’s army.
Better:
After considerable research, a French scientist, Aper, discovered a means for keeping food fresh for an extended period of time. His discovery was used by Napoleon's army.
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(And for those who are curious, his invention was the tin can.)
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