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Lucas21c Posted 14 years ago
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Could you check whether the following sentence is fine?
Thank you.
UN and NGO reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties, attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of nation states to end their goals.
Thank you.
UN and NGO reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties, attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of nation states to end their goals.
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Hi, Could you check whether the following sentence is fine? No. Here are a few edits and comments.
- Hi, Could you check whether the following sentence is fine?
- No.
- Here are a few edits and comments.
- Thank you.
- ) and supplant critical functions of nation states to end their goals .
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Hi,
Could you check whether the following sentence is fine? No. Here are a few edits and comments.
Thank you.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties, attract the loyalties
Could you check whether the following sentence is fine? No. Here are a few edits and comments.
Thank you.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties, attract the loyalties
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Thank you for your answer, Clive. And, maybe, I misunderstand the usage of 'check' because I need edits and comments also. If I ask, "Could you confirm whether the following sentence is fine?", would it be more polite? I hope you do not feel my question is too arrogant or too impolite.
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(Here is revised one.)
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties of each state, attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of nation states (1) to achieve their goals / (2) so that they will achieve their goals.
Could you tell me which one is a better form between (1) and (2) if the whole sentence is fine?
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of traditional national loyalties of each state, attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of nation states (1) to achieve their goals / (2) so that they will achieve their goals.
Could you tell me which one is a better form between (1) and (2) if the whole sentence is fine?
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How about the following sentence? Logically, it closer to what I want to say.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of the traditional national loyalties of people. They attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of a nation state to achieve their own goals.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of the traditional national loyalties of people. They attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of a nation state to achieve their own goals.
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Hi,
How about the following sentence? Logically, it closer to what I want to say.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of the traditional national loyalties of people. They attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of a nation state to achieve their own goals.
I would mention citizens. It is citizens who have loyalties, not state
How about the following sentence? Logically, it closer to what I want to say.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of the traditional national loyalties of people. They attract the loyalties and supplant critical functions of a nation state to achieve their own goals.
I would mention citizens. It is citizens who have loyalties, not state
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Thank you, Clive. However, it deviated a little from what I want to say. I think I can make it clearer.
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of people's traditional national loyalties. They attract the loyalty of state's citizens, and supplant critical functions of a state A) to achieve their own goals / B) so that they will achieve their own goals.
(1)
In this
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of people's traditional national loyalties. They attract the loyalty of state's citizens, and supplant critical functions of a state A) to achieve their own goals / B) so that they will achieve their own goals.
(1)
In this
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Hi,
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of people's traditional national loyalties. They attract the loyalty of state's citizens, and supplant critical functions of a state A) to achieve their own goals / B) so that they will achieve their own goals.
How about this?
The UN and NGOs reflect
The UN and NGOs reflect a weakening of people's traditional national loyalties. They attract the loyalty of state's citizens, and supplant critical functions of a state A) to achieve their own goals / B) so that they will achieve their own goals.
How about this?
The UN and NGOs reflect
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