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Umirazeti Posted 10 years ago
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Grammar and Punctuation
Hi everyone, need some feedback on the sentences below. Are these grammatically correct?
1. A mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy is trying to find direction in his life, as his childhood is also influenced by two of his uncles: a former drug addict and a gangster.
2. Set in early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indian, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy and his relationships with his father, Maniam, and his uncles, former drug-addict Bala and local gangster Dorai.
1. A mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy is trying to find direction in his life, as his childhood is also influenced by two of his uncles: a former drug addict and a gangster.
2. Set in early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indian, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy and his relationships with his father, Maniam, and his uncles, former drug-addict Bala and local gangster Dorai.
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1. The grammar is correct but the use of "also" needs additional previous context to justify it, and it is not obvious how this would work since this seems to be the first mention of the boy. 2.
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- The grammar is correct but the use of "also" needs additional previous context to justify it, and it is not obvious how this would work since this seems to be the first mention of the boy.
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- The first "sentence" is not a grammatically complete sentence.
- I suppose also that "Indian" should read "Indians".
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1. The grammar is correct but the use of "also" needs additional previous context to justify it, and it is not obvious how this would work since this seems to be the first mention of the boy.
2. The first "sentence" is not a grammatically complete sentence. I suppose also that "Indian" should read "Indians".
2. The first "sentence" is not a grammatically complete sentence. I suppose also that "Indian" should read "Indians".
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Thank you. Well noted. How about these?
1. A mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy is trying to find direction in his life, as his childhood behavior is strongly influenced by two of his uncles: a former drug addict and a gangster.
2. Set in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indians history, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move
1. A mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy is trying to find direction in his life, as his childhood behavior is strongly influenced by two of his uncles: a former drug addict and a gangster.
2. Set in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indians history, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move
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In (2), the first "sentence" is still not a full sentence. Also "for Malaysian Indians history" isn't right.
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Thanks for the feedback. The incomplete sentence is " Set in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indians history, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances" right?
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How about this:
Set in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indian, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy and his relationships with his father, Maniam, and his uncles, former drug-addict Bala and local gangster Dorai.
Set in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indian, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy and his relationships with his father, Maniam, and his uncles, former drug-addict Bala and local gangster Dorai.
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umirazetiSet in the early 1990s, which is the critical period for Malaysian Indian, who are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities and survive under harsh circumstances.As I mentioned, it should say "critical period for Malaysian Indians".
It is still not a complete sentence. You haven't changed anything that could
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Feedback for this:
It is the early 1990s, a severely critical period for Malaysian Indians. They are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities, made to survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy, and his relationship with his father Maniam, and his uncles – former drug addict Bala, and local gangster Dorai.
It is the early 1990s, a severely critical period for Malaysian Indians. They are forsaken by the estate owners and are forced to move to the cities, made to survive under harsh circumstances. The story follows a mischievous 12-year-old boy named Appoy, and his relationship with his father Maniam, and his uncles – former drug addict Bala, and local gangster Dorai.
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