Your grammar seems generally fine, but it can be polished: Based on the points above, social rules certainly do not let us exercise full freedom of choice. Education plays a significant role in this. Societies in which most members are highly educate d e ncourage individual freedom, while those deeply rooted in age-old customs and beliefs will need time to permit their members to live a life of choice.
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