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Spring Posted 22 years ago
Grammar

Grammar

Dear Teachers, could you please check my sentences for grammar and word choice?

Your eyes’ never fading radiant smile exhausts my exhaustion and floods my every new day with sunshine.

Without your help I would sink like a huge rock in a vast ocean; with your help I am unsinkable.

Thank you for being a wonderful friend. I hope your Christmas holiday brims over with joyousness.

Thank you very much for your generous help!!

Spring
  

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'The constant, radiant smile of your eyes energizes me, and floods every new day with sunshine. Without your help I would sink like a rock in the ocean, but with your help I am unsinkable. Thank you for being a wonderful friend.

— Mister Micawber

  • 'The constant, radiant smile of your eyes energizes me, and floods every new day with sunshine.
  • Without your help I would sink like a rock in the ocean, but with your help I am unsinkable.
  • Thank you for being a wonderful friend.
  • ' This is a bit overdone unless you are writing to your boyfriend, Spring.
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'The constant, radiant smile of your eyes energizes me, and floods every new day with sunshine. Without your help I would sink like a rock in the ocean, but with your help I am unsinkable. Thank you for being a wonderful friend. I hope your Christmas holiday brims over with joy.'


This is a bit overdone unless you are writing to your boyfriend, Spring.
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Now I know exactly what to write my girl! Emotion: smile
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Isn't this what we might call positively purple prose?
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Why would you call it "purple prose"? What does it mean?

Spring
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Mister Micawber thank you for revising my sentences. I changed the first sentence a little bit for I did not like the words "constant" and "energizis".

Your eyes' never fading smile dissipates my fatigue and unfailingly floods our working environment with sunshine. (I truly draw so much energy from this person's optimistic and energetic nature. No relationship exists between us.)
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I exaggerate, of course.

Purple prose is overly dramatic and emotional writing full of ornate or flowery language.
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