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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Grammar
Gramar and sentence structure
I am very rusty on grammar. I am writing an essay and I have a question about the last sentence of this paragraph. Is it technically acceptable and how and why should it be punctuated?
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The screeches of seagulls intermittently punctuated the continual sound of the gentle surf and sea breeze. There were occasional sounds of laughter and squeals as children plunged into the shocking cold water. I watched a haze gray warship steam slowly up the channel and through the Chesapeake Bay Bridge, headed for the naval base at Little Creek inlet. Gazing in that direction, my eye caught the glint of sunlight reflecting from an airliner slowly descending on final approach to Norfolk. We had been there only yesterday to see off my son-in-law, Matt. He had orders to join the USS McFaul at an undisclosed location overseas. The gloom of separation had begun, as it had in previous deployments when my grandchildren and I had stood on this beach, and watched their father’s ship sail out of the bay, slowly disappearing in the offing.
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The screeches of seagulls intermittently punctuated the continual sound of the gentle surf and sea breeze. There were occasional sounds of laughter and squeals as children plunged into the shocking cold water. I watched a haze gray warship steam slowly up the channel and through the Chesapeake Bay Bridge, headed for the naval base at Little Creek inlet. Gazing in that direction, my eye caught the glint of sunlight reflecting from an airliner slowly descending on final approach to Norfolk. We had been there only yesterday to see off my son-in-law, Matt. He had orders to join the USS McFaul at an undisclosed location overseas. The gloom of separation had begun, as it had in previous deployments when my grandchildren and I had stood on this beach, and watched their father’s ship sail out of the bay, slowly disappearing in the offing.
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Top answer
I would remove the comma before and because you don't have another subject for watched . stood and watched go together with the same subject, so no comma. I wouldn't change anything else.
- I would remove the comma before and because you don't have another subject for watched .
- stood and watched go together with the same subject, so no comma.
- I wouldn't change anything else.
- CJ
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I would remove the comma before and because you don't have another subject for watched. stood and watched go together with the same subject, so no comma. I wouldn't change anything else.
CJ
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