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Englishuser Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing

Good writing?

Hi,

I'd very much like to know what you think of the way in which the paragraph below is written. Please pay attention to the writer's choice of words and style rather than to the grammaticality of the text. I'm looking forward to your comments.
But, I have got this omelette only after breaking the eggs. My peace of mind is badly shattered. Hardly does it happen that I am not woken up from a deep slumber by this goddamned toy of mine. At times, it seems to ring non-stop. I come back from the washroom and find, to my utter rage, three missed calls and 2 or 3 SMSs. Now I am obliged to call them back all at my expense ( By the way, mobile calls are very expensive in Pakistan) and answer the SMSs. On many Sundays, there are urgent calls from office--means sudden instructions to report to office!Then I ask myself "Where do I stand?" I cannot do with the mobile, I cannot do away with it.

Source: English-test.net, 16 September 2006
  

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You failed to include the disclaimer that the writer of the paragraph added: Just some incoherent thoughts! This is important in assessing the paragraph you quote.

  • You failed to include the disclaimer that the writer of the paragraph added: Just some incoherent thoughts!
  • This is important in assessing the paragraph you quote.
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You failed to include the disclaimer that the writer of the paragraph added:
Just some incoherent thoughts!

This is important in assessing the paragraph you quote.
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Hi Mister Micawber,

You wrote:
You failed to include the disclaimer that the writer of the paragraph added:

Just some incoherent thoughts!
This is important in assessing the paragraph you quote.

Is it? If you just seek to assess the style in which this paragraph is written, and t

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